|"Do you play basketball?" - Trying to get into UF.
5 - Once again, you are amazing. : P Once implementing your revisions, I will submit my essay and my application...
UndergraduateAutogazimAutogazim - Oct 27, 2008
|Claudius in "Hamlet" by Shakespeare
NEW - Hamlet is a brilliant tragic play by William Shakespeare. Claudius is the former king's brother. After he kills king...
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|Music, a new way to communicate and relate - Commonapp essay
NEW - Hope that members and moderators could critique my essay. Thanks in advance. "Beautiful..." an evocative word whispered, soft...
|Classical Essay - Abortion The Right to Choose
Writing Feedbacktaiyakitaiyaki - Oct 27, 2008
|'no longer felt like a foreigner' - a setback you have faced - UMich and Purdue
NEW - Describe a setback that you have faced. How did you resolve it? How did the outcome affect you? If...
|The problem of balancing family priorities and education -Admissions Essay
|our sixth loss in a row - Common App. 150 word short answer.
NEW - 150 words exactly. Our football team had just suffered our sixth loss in a row. A winning season...
|I have faced many obstacles to overcome - Personal Statement
NEW - Below is my personal statement for admission to UCF. Any advice would be appreciated! Thanks! Personal Statement: ...
|'How much does the Smokey Jack's Burger cost me?' Dissect my essay... ED to UPenn
Undergraduatelikaitailikaitai - Oct 26, 2008
|Significant school activity
NEW - Discuss the significance to you of the school or summer activity in which you have been most involved. ...
|"more valuable than winning a contest" - a significant experience, its impact on you
7 - Well, go through it carefully and look for things such as "can't" and "won't." If you see any of...
UndergraduateEchoEF_Team5 - Oct 26, 2008
|A pessimist sees the difficulty in every opportunity My UF admissions essay
5 - You're very welcome. An admissions board is looking for a bit more than an one-liner as to how this...
Undergraduatemimi101EF_Team5 - Oct 26, 2008
|UF Admissions Essay - Overcoming Rejection
2 - I am concerned that the second half of the prompt is not addressed in your essay. You've done a...
Undergraduatex3racha3lEF_Team5 - Oct 26, 2008
|the activites you mentioned - Short Answer Common App
2 - There is so much emphasis placed on kids getting involved in sports that people overlook the importance of the...
Undergraduatex3racha3lChink - Oct 26, 2008
|Mock Trial - 250+ common app essay any revisions would be a great help
2 - Good afternoon :) This is a good subject for this type of essay. Mechanically, make sure you are...
Undergraduategokhalea09EF_Team5 - Oct 26, 2008
|Marlboro First Aid Squad/ Real parental Support/ Goal; RUTGERS U- 3Essays
2 - Good afternoon. In regards to the first essay, it seems that your point is that one must allow...
Undergraduateto91EF_Team5 - Oct 26, 2008
|UPenn, why Penn essay 1 page, need input applying ED
NEW - Hi I need some help with the Why Upenn essay, the actualy question is. Describe your course of study...
|Question- Evaluate the influence your family has had on you.
3 - Wow. I am really surprised you think my essay is that great. You really lifted a huge amount of...
Undergraduatenikokoskinasnikokoskinas - Oct 26, 2008
|'being dismissed from class' - Emory University Supplement
2 - Good morning. A couple of suggestions: "One needs to imagine oneself at the..." Since you stayed...
UndergraduatesreekarEF_Team5 - Oct 26, 2008
|The use of contractions in my admission essay / I am vs. I'm
5 - The use of contractions is largely inappropriate in formal academic writing. Many instructors will count off for their use,...
Grammar, UsagejujubeanEF_Team5 - Oct 26, 2008
|my mother made a decision that would change my life forever - admission UF
5 - thank you!...
Undergraduatejellison09jellison09 - Oct 26, 2008
|Society of Notes...revision and comments
NEW - Last essay, I swear! I'm glad I found this site though, as it's been an invaluable resource. I'm thinking...
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|Guzheng (Chinese Zither) - Commonapp short answer, revision
NEW - Please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer). Here is...
|Georgetown question: disscussion of "Significance"
3 - I just finished an essay responding to this prompt. Now I'm pretty sure I have got way off the...
UndergraduateEchoEcho - Oct 26, 2008
|Brown Early Decision Essay-any advice and constructive criticism welcome
UndergraduateScannerDarklyScannerDarkly - Oct 26, 2008
|Interest in math and science essay...caltech
3 - Thank you for your time! It's been really really helpful. One more essay sometime tomorrow, and I'll be done!...
Undergraduatejangoc44jangoc44 - Oct 26, 2008
|150 Word essay about violin learning is 154
2 - Good evening. Mechanically and grammatically the piece is clean; the paragraphs are well structured and nicely organized. You...
Undergraduategokhalea09EF_Team5 - Oct 26, 2008
|Finding the college of my dreams is not a simple task; why transfer?
2 - Good evening. I think your response is truthful while still being respectful, a very good response to their...
Undergraduatelburgess88EF_Team5 - Oct 26, 2008
|MIT World I come from essay - a whirlwind of emotions and cultures
2 - My first encounter with change was at age four. Born and brought up in Nagoya, Japan, I learned the...
Undergraduatejangoc44EF_Team5 - Oct 26, 2008
|"favorite quotation from an essay or book" - Princetone University (needs revision)
UndergraduateTLaw88EF_Team5 - Oct 26, 2008