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2 - "What I feel is the most important activity I take part in is volunteering in the elementary school across...
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7 - Sorry Kevin, I have actually changed the content. Do you prefer the former entry? Thanks for editing tho!...
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|Essay comparing two Short Stories-Topic: Naive Narrator
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|Claremont College Essay (Leadership, ANALYTICAL ESSAY)
2 - Fairly good overall. A couple of revised sentences for you: "Many are familiar with the concept of justice...
UndergraduatesukjeffreyEF_Sean - Dec 23, 2008
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3 - Yes, it is true that watching videos online and studying the website give you plenty of understanding, even if...
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|Essay about myself.... in 3rd eyes...
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|Literature: "The luncheon" and "The escape" by W.S. Maugham
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Book ReportsAmyRemusEF_Kevin - Dec 23, 2008
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3 - Yes, you are right. Big, fat lie. :) And besides, one person's safe is another person's candid. Wait, does...
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|A volunteer service; Georgia Tech Essay-What would you do?
2 - By gaining leadership experiences and a lesson in community service, I will make my life more meaningful. I...
UndergraduatejusangleeEF_Kevin - Dec 23, 2008
|'From the poor slums of Mumbai to America' - Brown application...
6 - Well, it is true that the "experience" you are describing is not clearly pinpointed. Add one sentence to the...
UndergraduatesriramsEF_Kevin - Dec 23, 2008
|"I'm from Dubai" - U of Wisconsin essay
7 - hello everybody...this is my revised version of the essay...I changed my approach to the topic and tried to emphasize...
Undergraduateprincetongirlprincetongirl - Dec 23, 2008
|UW Personal Statement, your college career to date
5 - Well, you do write quite well, and your long sentences are not run-on sentences. it is good that you...
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|The Jerome Fish Program ; UPenn Dual Management &Technology
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|Penn why essay; I want to be a psychologist
5 - Thanks all your guys...suggestion accepted.. Yes, i am from China and English is my second language.....
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|I have earned more A's; About what I believe; Essay for Yale
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4 - Your welcome. Well since Kevin commented on it and he's way better than I am, i dont think there's...
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|'hard work is rewarded' - common app short answer, cross country.
5 - My most meaningful commitment over the past four years has been running on the cross country team . ...
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7 - YES! You are right to cut it down. When you write something, just like when you do anything else,...
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|"Spirit Club" - your activities essay
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4 - Just one idea: As I perused Brown's website, I discovered that their program for international studies offered much...
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|Upenn Essay- the academic, social and athletic networks
6 - Wow, that is good advice, too. Well, keep all of that in mind, and proceed with tons of confidence!...
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|'emphasis on individual' - Sarah Lawrence College supplement
4 - Try this: Finally, the abbreviation of my name is CLS, and the abbreviation of Sarah Lawrence College...
UndergraduatecharliesunEF_Kevin - Dec 23, 2008
|Common App: elaborate on 1 of your activities (choir of Crescent Girls)
3 - I was in choir of Crescent Girls' School during grades 9 and 10. I participated in it initially due...
UndergraduateBaiwanyuEF_Kevin - Dec 23, 2008
|A CULT and YOUTH?- UC Essay Prompt #1. revise.
7 - I was repeatedly taught that I did was not affiliated with any particular "religion" but to a "method" by...
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