|UPenn Supplement Essay - innovation matters
2 - You've more or less got it. The first paragraph is a bit disconnected from the rest, though, and you...
UndergraduatemagicinworldsEF_Sean - Dec 30, 2008
|My family taught me to think about others first and be thankful; Let your Life Speak
3 - When the Korean War broke out, she was separated from her family and was left with no choice but...
Undergraduatekim1234EF_Kevin - Dec 30, 2008
|NJIT essay - evaluate and edit if needed! 'application and integration of technology in most fields'
10 - Thanks Kevin !...
Undergraduatekeyurjain21keyurjain21 - Dec 30, 2008
|NYU 5 short question supplement- Stern
5 - Thank you Kevin and Dhruv for the help! Any additional suggestions are welcome! Thanks again!...
UndergraduateLinnusLinnus - Dec 30, 2008
|Common App Extracurricular Essay - 150 words or fewer.
5 - I would love to talk about my experiences, maybe even elaborating on some of my gigs, but its only...
Undergraduatedhruvsharmadhruvsharma - Dec 30, 2008
|My Personal Statement, I sent it in to some schools. comments?
3 - thank you! (;...
UndergraduateCandaaceeeCandaaceee - Dec 30, 2008
|Lafayette Short Answer ("Writing is a game")
8 - I'll help you use commas as they are to be used for good composition, below. Also, read The elements...
Undergraduatekofpower2411EF_Kevin - Dec 30, 2008
|Common App Personal Essay ("calculus problem")
10 - First, I'll say that your essay is great. It really is interesting (as others have mentioned), and that is...
UndergraduateLinnusEF_Kevin - Dec 30, 2008
|Theran And His Problem, and activity writing
5 - This paragraph above is full of information, and information is not so inspiring to the reader. This part is...
UndergraduateZayniacEF_Kevin - Dec 30, 2008
|'study human evolutionary genetics' - UPENN PROF and WHY PENN ESSAYS
4 - Since I was eight, when I learned about the anatomy of the human body, I have been intrigued by...
Undergraduateac10EF_Kevin - Dec 30, 2008
|common app essay - Robert Fulghum's essay
6 - A few years ago I stumbled across Robert Fulghum's essay, "All I Really Need to Know I Learned in...
Undergraduateac10EF_Kevin - Dec 30, 2008
|Science/Math Program; Contribution
Undergraduatecoffeemania923coffeemania923 - Dec 30, 2008
|"Wild goose father"; TUFTS- "Let your life speak"
6 - Sure, it was intended to be funny but I, who was supposed to begiving half the speech, probably should...
UndergraduatezowzowEF_Kevin - Dec 30, 2008
|University of Rochester Supplement 2 (many different points of view)
Undergraduatempatel246mpatel246 - Dec 30, 2008
|'the BBB Society Professor of the Year' - UPENN professor short answer
6 - Concentrating in neuroscience while majoring in biology in my undergraduate years, will grant me the resources needed to better...
Undergraduatemad3na90EF_Kevin - Dec 30, 2008
|Claremont Mckenna: leadership essay
2 - This is why I chose Dr. Donald Ainslie Henderson (1928-), epidemiologist and physician. This sentence is unclear,(above) I...
Undergraduateshahindian2009EF_Kevin - Dec 30, 2008
|UMich Setback Essay (alcoholism addiction problem)
11 - I love your essay tofu. It's simply amazing, and very engaging. I couldn't remove my eyes from the page!...
Undergraduatetofuamy - Dec 30, 2008
|UW Activity Log
2 - Being in this club has taught me a lot; I've learned how to start an organization, plan and organize...
Undergraduatex soundclashEF_Kevin - Dec 30, 2008
|advice for Stanford essays (a sense of intellectual vitality)
4 - This essay is definitely polished, so, I don't think I can give much constructive criticism. Well, I was just...
UndergraduateAngela629yee - Dec 30, 2008
|Transition between paragraphs
Essaysmycdsacks - Dec 30, 2008
|Why BU? (the opportunity for the students)
Undergraduatex soundclashlattent - Dec 30, 2008
|"My passion in economics" - Cornell CALS
2 - Throughout your essay, it's pretty well done. But I think you need to rewrite a few sentences to make...
UndergraduateTootleyAngela629 - Dec 30, 2008
|Commonapp short answer, activity (I was in the pool)
UndergraduateBlissBliss - Dec 30, 2008
|Common Application-Personal Essay-(Essay of your choice)
3 - This is a good essay, but I don't think your focusing enough on yourself. It's your personal statement and...
UndergraduateMimiroselilly25FFtoMay1 - Dec 30, 2008
|Short Response for University of Michigan - any feedbacks are welcomed
4 - However embarrassed I am to admit it, it's never easy for me to get used to American culture. ...
UndergraduatesenjenzEF_Kevin - Dec 30, 2008
|Uni. of Rochester Supplement, the picture puzzle
3 - I think you need a specific example of how you are independent and how you have perseverance, if that...
Undergraduatekimku91piggytails626 - Dec 30, 2008
|just a quick question about admission essay formats
9 - I think you should double space it since the essay is uploaded. If you are copying and pasting it...
Undergraduatepencilyasin391 - Dec 30, 2008
|NYU Supplement (trait+New York City)
Undergraduatelrnsmith09lrnsmith09 - Dec 30, 2008
|'human civilizations' - My JHU Supplement essay-why do you want to choose this major?
Undergraduatebaubaubaubau - Dec 30, 2008
|Common App - "Cliff Solving"; being an assistant teacher to a third grade class
Undergraduaten00bl3tBliss - Dec 30, 2008