|UW short essay - "race and culture at school"
Undergraduateichid99EF_Sean - Jan 5, 2009
|Entrance Essay - Master of Public Affairs
4 - You've done a great job writing this essay. The grammar is nearly flawless, and your style flows smoothly. I...
Graduatemkp622EF_Sean - Jan 5, 2009
|VCU essay: "Education and Life: A Personal Statement." In this essay, discuss your educational goals
8 - In keeping with Kevin's suggestion, you might want to describe your artwork in more detail, and then explore the...
Undergraduatejd6365EF_Sean - Jan 5, 2009
|CMC essay; "First in war, first in peace, and first in our countrymen's hearts"
16 - Thanks Constance! Its just I reeeallllly want to go to CMC...but there is no use worrying now. At least...
Undergraduatelattentlattent - Jan 5, 2009
|Essay comments - "A place you go to relax"
4 - Thank you two for the feedback! I will change the end of the first paragraph to (my thesis statement):...
Writing FeedbackJerrySpockJerrySpock - Jan 5, 2009
|Teacher of influence essay
Undergraduateichid99jenf3r - Jan 5, 2009
|I want to be an architect! / Pratt Institute
4 - I'd say you could probably eliminate most of paragraphs 1 and 5, neither of which add much to your...
UndergraduatebirchkkEF_Sean - Jan 5, 2009
|'The scoreboard, basketball' - Villanova's Separate Essay
Undergraduatevkwangvkwang - Jan 5, 2009
|VCU Personal Statement
UndergraduatetiararkellyEF_Kevin - Jan 5, 2009
|Could you assist me if these question are well answered (the programme)
3 - Yes, good advice! For question #1, add a sentence about the specific sustainable energy initiatives that interest you... and...
GraduateetchinamanoEF_Kevin - Jan 5, 2009
|Experience which has influence on me ("This language is math")
7 - Yes, isn't that strange? They made it unnecessarily difficult to understand. I had to read it over and over,...
UndergraduatetonydengcnuEF_Kevin - Jan 5, 2009
|Common Apps Short Question- 'A community service experience'
10 - Too many words leaves you like Yosemite Sam when he has 12 pistols and doesn't know which one to...
UndergraduatechickpigEF_Kevin - Jan 5, 2009
|UPenn, Brown, - short answer Thank you
7 - "I think that some people thought it was cheap for society to ignore poor people and, if they had...
Undergraduatehopefullfoodforthought - Jan 5, 2009
|Pratt Undergraduate Admissions Essay ("left America to live in Hong Kong")
8 - Ha ha, that is some straightforward advice from Sean! Yes, the two focal points of the essay are: ...
Undergraduategjl0411EF_Kevin - Jan 5, 2009
|Common Application Essay - Sig. Experience (Lego League)
8 - Here is a way to adhere to a rule called "number agreement." Keep things either singular or plural in...
Undergraduatemichael0310EF_Kevin - Jan 5, 2009
|Who am I? (200 words)
16 - I have always believed that only after everything external has been taken away is the left person the real...
UndergraduategracetmEF_Constance - Jan 5, 2009
|Michigan Essays (diversity, economics, setback)
Undergraduatechickpigchickpig - Jan 5, 2009
|Internet has given people access to information; we can't live easily without
Writing Feedbackfranklampardenfranklamparden - Jan 5, 2009
|Very confused on my Thesis statement. AP Euro History class
7 - Trojan's revision is strong, but highlights the fact that you really only have two points, instead of three as...
EssaysnikbijEF_Sean - Jan 5, 2009
|"I should have been dead." I've been poisoned. Attacked with blurred vision and slurred tongue...
UndergraduatetalkiEF_Sean - Jan 5, 2009
|PERSONAL STATEMENT FOR CHINAMANO ELWIN TINASHE-
GraduateetchinamanoEF_Sean - Jan 5, 2009
|my admission essay ("Landscape painting")
5 - Hansam got most of it, I'll try the rest... "drawing western painting" is a bit awkward for me...
Undergraduatefl415Tsukamaru - Jan 5, 2009
|Personal Statement, taking pictures as my hobby.
8 - Also, when working on the transitions, you may want to use them to emphasize that the essay is really...
UndergraduatejohnatroneclEF_Sean - Jan 4, 2009
|'the vast resources' - Why UPS short answer
8 - i agree with kevin but after you delete paragraph 2, you should add a little more to paragraph 3...
Undergraduateichid99vk123 - Jan 4, 2009
|why you are considering Rhodes College?
7 - A few more grammatical fixes: "The harder the problems are, the more excited I am to figure them...
UndergraduatecharliesunEF_Sean - Jan 4, 2009
|U of Washington essay-"my great-grandfather was executed..."
5 - Overall, a very well-written essay. Some tips: "he was unable to find a sustaining job," "Sustaining" sounds a...
UndergraduatedoooleleEF_Sean - Jan 4, 2009
|member of IEEE - help with my statement of purpose for MS
NEW - Moderators kindly help me out with my SOP.Please check the syntatical structure of the essay and format the sentences...
|'Unfortunate beginning' - Common app essay - significant person (my mother)
5 - The moment my mother walked away from my abusive father (for the sake of her children), I finally realized...
Undergraduateichid99EF_Kevin - Jan 4, 2009
|Rhodes College short answer---effective leadership
Undergraduatecharliesuncharliesun - Jan 4, 2009
|Florida Institute of technology essay ending paragraph
6 - I remember working day and night for months together , drafting a plan for my own car; I visited...
Undergraduatekeyurjain21EF_Kevin - Jan 4, 2009