|UC Prompt #2 - Jean Paul
Undergraduatesatyr5EF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|"Imagine" by John Lennon; UC Promt 1- Morality Class
2 - This is a powerful essay! As soeone who grew up hearing Imagine and other important Beatles music, it intrigues...
Undergraduatesatyr5EF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|UC Prompt #1 - "can I walk the walk?"
UndergraduatekMzkMz - Nov 28, 2008
|Springfield College Physician's Assistance Addmission Essay
2 - Within your essay, I think that "physician's assistant" should not be capitalized, because it is not a proper noun...
Undergraduateulbz1190EF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|Catholic school, September in Florida - Common App Essay PROMPT 2
6 - Thanks a lot for the corrections saviorknights, 'especially' the one about the mixed-up tenses. I never would have caught...
Undergraduaterandomzmrandomzm - Nov 28, 2008
|UC prompt #1 - ""Are you two twins?"
5 - - Does it flow? (good transitions) You have a very distinguished style and it is portrayed quite vividly in...
UndergraduatesaviorknightsPen Name - Nov 28, 2008
|My life vs. my Chinese parents + an art class, UC Prompt Essays
4 - Here are some suggestions to help you: Prompt one: ...neither of them could speak English correctly ...
UndergraduatevclicoolEF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|Physical Education (A Key in Establishing relationships)
SpeechescheereylEF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|Growing up knowing I had Transcobalmin II was a little alienating - essay about determination
3 - Hi, I revised my response and would greatly appreciate it if you told me your thoughts. Thanks Danielle3...
UndergraduateDanielle3Danielle3 - Nov 28, 2008
|Polar bear essay - I could really use on what i've written so far
2 - Great! I made some minor changes below. It will be good if you have a good intro paragraph and...
Writing Feedbackshannon1432EF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|"my focus was helping my classmate" - Kyle was born with a disability
2 - Hello! You probably should not use Kyle's real, full name, but instead just all him "Kyle." How about...
UndergraduatejoycewriceEF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008
|Santorini, Personal Statement
5 - Since you made the trip possible for yourself, maybe you should talk about how you made it possible and...
Undergraduatemrlanastasiab17 - Nov 28, 2008
|to make school my priority - UC personal statement
5 - the club you are in charge of-"you wouldn't have it any other way" <--take that part out, it is...
Undergraduateanastasiab17mrl - Nov 28, 2008
|prompt 1 (UC schools) any corrections/advice needed
NEW - The only life I have ever known has taken place in the city I will always call home, Carlsbad....
|"we need to follow our dreams" - UT Topic B: An issue of importance...
NEW - The topic is this: Choose an issue of importance to you-the issue could be personal, school related, local, political,...
|Finding strengths and weaknesses of the article
3 - Hi, from my experience of writing book reviews i can say that you to have a thorough understanding...
Book ReportsAmeliKaranTrehan - Nov 28, 2008
|UC #2 - Optimism and cheerful personality
2 - I can see that you have many good ideas. you point out how your family, playing piano, and being...
Undergraduatechipmunkcrappyhair - Nov 28, 2008
|sport called Badminton - my uc prompt 2 essay
UndergraduateNOkiaTNOkiaT - Nov 28, 2008
|particular life experiences, perspectives, talents, commitments
NEW - 1)The University values an educational environment that provides all members of the campus community with opportunities to grow and...
|UC Transfer Prompt 1- human behavior
NEW - I don't know if my essay sounds too jumpy or grammatical errors. Any kind of comment is welcomed. Thank...
|'Poor economics run by selfish politicians' - Essay of an Issue of Importance - to UT
NEW - I just wrote this out for the application to UT. Though I'm graduating next year my communication skills are...
|Playing the role of audience - My UC #2 essay
|"Detroit, that's a rough place" - UC application prompt 1
Undergraduateshaydiegoteenaxboee - Nov 27, 2008
|"to work at a hospital helping children" - personal quality, talent
4 - Cut back on the story. Do you know how many essays admission counselors read about tragedies? You...
Undergraduatevanvan513teenaxboee - Nov 27, 2008
|The worries - UC Personal Statement
4 - Less story more more more reflection. Your first paragraph was magnificent! Now you don't need to say no...
Undergraduateickleohieteenaxboee - Nov 27, 2008
|"my father has (has not) shaped my dreams and aspirations" - prompt 1 help
Undergraduatelilibeth91760teenaxboee - Nov 27, 2008
|"my understanding of communication" - UC prompt#1
4 - Your essay is mostly story. Where is your reflection? What did you learn from this? You should have 10%...
Undergraduateksj430teenaxboee - Nov 27, 2008
|Poli Sci Major UC Transfer Personal Statement (opinions required)
UndergraduateVaheMVaheM - Nov 27, 2008
|Personal Response -The Wars
Writing FeedbackFissionMailedFissionMailed - Nov 27, 2008
|UC essay prompts 1&2- "The Jaws of Life" Any Critique would be appreciated!
Undergraduatejojomoverjojomover - Nov 27, 2008