|"Congratulations! You are going to be a mother!"
9 - OK, I'm assuming the above is the new conclusion. One suggestion: "...talented, a natural leader, and overall...
Undergraduateccn7EF_Team5 - Oct 18, 2008
|"College was the best time of my life." -UCF APPLICATION ESSAY
3 - thanks!!...
Undergraduatevivalavidavivalavida - Oct 17, 2008
|Private Eloquence/ PAST EXPERIENCE
Writing Feedbackcowman809EF_Team5 - Oct 17, 2008
|Name a professor with whom you would like to study or conduct research with
Undergraduategbtlgbtl - Oct 17, 2008
|how does Penn make a perfect match for you?
UndergraduategbtlEF_Team5 - Oct 17, 2008
|Obstacles or 'bumps in the road in your academic or personal life
4 - Sure! "...and I'm confident that..." "...economical crisis don't help..." "...center and I've noticed..." I...
Undergraduatefernaj13EF_Team5 - Oct 17, 2008
|teleporting mentally to a different world
4 - That would work as well. Generally, whatever tense is more natural and comes easier to you will reflect itself...
UndergraduatemickeygirlEF_Team5 - Oct 17, 2008
|FSU admissions essay- worthy enough to attend Florida State University?
Undergraduatebethany_shphrdEF_Team5 - Oct 17, 2008
|"I am well prepared and primed" - FSU essay
3 - I like the new addition. I suggest changing the middle of the first sentence to be a little less...
UndergraduatecnwilliamsEF_Team5 - Oct 17, 2008
|essay about myself, when/where I was born, my study, hobbies, etc.
2 - "...I am the baggiest one." What does "baggiest" describe here? Do you mean biggest? I'm not sure... :) ...
Writing FeedbackcrawlingEF_Team5 - Oct 17, 2008
|Cigarretes has been banned from public environment. Agree or Disagree?
NEW - Essay topic: Cigarretes has been banned from public environment. Agree or Disagree?? Around the world people are concerned...
Writing Feedbackvipao -
|this paper significantly transformed me - pls edit this common app essay
2 - "...freshman ..." "...editor-in-chief ..." In regards to content, you are very concise and organized. Your piece is...
Undergraduateds816EF_Team5 - Oct 17, 2008
|How to safe the Earth + Personal reflection of my presentation - Essays
4 - Good afternoon. From your posting, it seems that this prompt requests specific information from specific material that you...
Writing FeedbackssddEF_Team5 - Oct 17, 2008
|how has your family influenced who you are? UCF admission essay
NEW - Please, tell me all i'm doing wrong in my paper. I have to submit my application for xfer today....
|my summer trip to Trinidad & Tobago - UF Essay Evaluation
2 - Good morning. Please note your other posting for mechanical and grammatical suggestions, as they still apply to this...
Undergraduateking723EF_Team5 - Oct 17, 2008
|Take advantage of every moment ; Colombia Essay/ Rutgers
NEW - Take advantage of every moment is what my older sister would always tell me. When I was 14 years...
Writing Feedbackcynthia180 -
|Need advice on essay question- "Unique characteristics and experiences"
3 - Hey, thanks alot. I think you are doing a great job on this boarding helping everyone out. I think...
UndergraduateGuruKidGuruKid - Oct 17, 2008
|"I have played piano" - Chopin's Second Ballade
6 - Thanks!...
Undergraduatepianolegend91pianolegend91 - Oct 16, 2008
|UF Essay - "Ready for My Unpredictable Future"
Undergraduateesthie_esthie_ - Oct 16, 2008
|GED Practice: Discuss the influence of rock music on young people
2 - "Because rock music is good entertainment for everyone, especially young people, it influences good physical condition, improvement of exercise...
UndergraduatefishermanEF_Team5 - Oct 16, 2008
|Essay for Fellowship-INFORMATION TECHNOLOGY MANAGEMENT
5 - Good afternoon. This is a very good start. You've done a great job explaining "the role of family...
GraduatefaraEF_Team5 - Oct 16, 2008
|CORNELL COMMON APP ESSAY; To feel desired is a primary biological need in life
2 - Good afternoon. My only suggestion is to make sure you are only capitalizing proper nouns and the first...
Undergraduateakhan11EF_Team5 - Oct 16, 2008
|What experiences have led you to select your professional field?
2 - "Zip, zap, zoom! " went my..." "...does my Play Station give way every..." I suggest wrapping the...
Writing FeedbackkimayaEF_Team5 - Oct 16, 2008
|"struggling to comprehend my nemesis" - a significant experience
2 - Good afternoon. This is an excellent essay! Mechanically and grammatically clean, organized, fluid, with a great story for...
UndergraduatecaliforniagirlEF_Team5 - Oct 16, 2008
|An unexpected act of kindness
4 - Good afternoon. Putting this piece at the beginning would be a great idea; it's a "hook" and sets...
Writing FeedbacklearningtowriteEF_Team5 - Oct 16, 2008
|Is there any error in this phrase?
8 - Good afternoon. Grammatically, as it is this statement is a fragment. I suggest: Obtaining an MBA will...
Grammar, UsagesaikarvnEF_Team5 - Oct 16, 2008
|'true inner being' - MY UF admission essay
2 - Good afternoon. One mechanical suggestion: "...including soccer, which I had never played before. By my senior...
UndergraduateHelenaEF_Team5 - Oct 16, 2008
|Three Hovering Doormen--Four sonnets forming one poem
2 - Good afternoon. OK, let's start at the top. A sonnet is a poem of fourteen lines, traditionally speaking....
PoetrySimoneEF_Team5 - Oct 16, 2008
|"I manage all of this", I would love to be a part of this place - FSU Essay - critique and ideas...
2 - "...say I have not, nor plan to, give in when these times occur." "...problems, and depend only on...
Undergraduatemoochykk33EF_Team5 - Oct 16, 2008
|'My determined and independent grandfather' - person who had a significant influence
2 - Good afternoon. Just a couple of suggestions. First, "Grandfather" should not be capitalized, unless it is the first...
Undergraduatelist00EF_Team5 - Oct 16, 2008