|"Do a good turn daily." - Rutgers Essay
4 - You got some good feedback from mstratton8, and i would add that this sentence can be improved: ...some...
UndergraduateErocknroll212EF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|"I feel it is better to be a leader than a follower." - UC Personal #2
UndergraduatebcbossmanEF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|"To start life afresh in California" - UC, What do you think of it so far?
6 - Yes, I understand what you mean. I was reading the first few paragraphs, and they are all so well-written...
UndergraduatemisheelEF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|"I am proud to be a freethinker" - UC prompt 2
2 - Excellent sentence right here: Suddenly, everything right felt so wrong, and everything wrong felt so right, yet my mind...
UndergraduateashelleEF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|"I am not a "nobody" - UC Prompt 2
3 - That was what I told myself when I decided to run for a position in the executive committee of...
UndergraduatewongxyEF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|Elaborate One of Your Activities - my father's golf club
Undergraduateop2607EF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|"Born in France" - UC prompt 1 and 2
8 - All you need is one good introductory sentence that says something like: The world that has shaped my dreams...
UndergraduatemerodirEF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|My Environment - Moving to the Philippines and to a new school
2 - However, after three whole years of life in the contrasting environment, I found myself sharing commonalities with the people...
Undergraduateop2607EF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|"a freshman who hated Chinese"; "chicken on fire" - UC PROMPT 1 & 2
Undergraduategman450EF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|"what do you want to do when you grow up?" - UC Prompt 1
7 - No, describing the world you come from is exactly what you have done here. I think you did answer...
UndergraduateNOkiaTEF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|"my drink" - UC Prompt #1
UndergraduatefabxxEF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|"my intended major is history" - UC personal statement. Prompt 2
Undergraduateanastasiab17EF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|"to talk about an issue I concern" (Wallstreet) - UT TOPIC B
2 - The nation's economy is in a recession, this year's college graduates face a job market that is not very...
UndergraduateZoeL14EF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|"my first-ever vacation" - UC app- prompt 2
UndergraduatesvcdtEF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|wonder and intrigue on how my high school career would unfold; UC essay "My urge for determination"
Undergraduateteddy411EF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|My involvement in theater - Acting was officially my new hobby. UC transfer essay
UndergraduateWildtalonaljashamy - Nov 30, 2008
|My older sister and her impact on my life - essay
UndergraduateRdenEF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|Arumentative Essay(MLA Style) Is Spanking the Right Way to Discipline
3 - Thanks Kevin...
Writing Feedbacksunnysidesunnyside - Nov 30, 2008
|SAIC Personal statement - your personal vision
Undergraduatepsypsypsypsy - Nov 30, 2008
|"My mom and dad's office" - UC prompt 1 and 2
UndergraduatesilversweetEF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|UC application (Activities & Awards, community service, additional comments
3 - Oh thank you for your help:) and..i have one more question actually.. for the 3rd statement, since it...
Undergraduateksj430ksj430 - Nov 30, 2008
|Essay feedback - Issue of terrorism and its significance to me
2 - Instead of using contractions (i.e. "didn't"), write the two words separately. For me, this meant being looked at...
Undergraduateaz2845EF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|Statement of Purpose for SAIC application, an artist
Undergraduateandreagaylepsypsy - Nov 30, 2008
|"I will always have a desire to help others." - UC Prompt 2
Undergraduatesome1uknownEF_Kevin - Nov 30, 2008
|"right now is my second chance" - UC Prompt #2
4 - I think you should state more clearly in the first two paragraphs what you're trying to get accross; after...
UndergraduatefabxxRich Monte - Nov 30, 2008
|The love for politics was planted in me at a young age but did not have the opportunity to sprout
10 - Why do you focus on literature in the last sentence? Last sentence should nicely wrap up the thesis statement...
UndergraduateSon_of_KingsRich Monte - Nov 30, 2008
|Personal statement- what i would bring to diversity in the Rice community
Undergraduateaz2845az2845 - Nov 29, 2008
|UC Transfer Prompt #1, Psychology Major
UndergraduateBatouBatou - Nov 29, 2008
|help me with an autobiographical research paper (the cultural diversity)
3 - I did do this research myself, thank you for your reply it was very helpful. I shall use this...
Research Papersmassey76massey76 - Nov 29, 2008
|'My parents gave me the best chance' - UC promp #1-parents influence
3 - thanks!...
Undergraduatekabyakkabyak - Nov 29, 2008