|'volunteering at local schools' - UC prompt#2 - Helping people
2 - Good evening :) I think you've got really good content here; you describe what experience/event you are proud...
Undergraduatemember123EF_Team5 - Nov 23, 2008
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UndergraduateJamandaJuiceEF_Team5 - Nov 23, 2008
|How to properly place the quotation which is referring to Enderun?
2 - Good evening :) You should consult your required citation style for final formatting questions, but I believe the...
Grammar, Usageeng1EF_Team5 - Nov 23, 2008
|"Linked to my grandfather's presence" -UC prompt 1
2 - I think this is a great piece, especially that first paragraph. You acknowledge and answer every facet of the...
UndergraduatesurfsandiegoEF_Team5 - Nov 23, 2008
|"The person, my grandpa" - UC prompt #2
2 - Good evening :) Since you didn't explain what type of assistance you were seeking, I have made some...
Undergraduatelyndn21EF_Team5 - Nov 23, 2008
|"I think Florida State is perfect" - FSU essay
2 - I think your content is a great answer to the prompt. You take each character trait and evaluate and...
UndergraduatealexanderstoddaEF_Team5 - Nov 23, 2008
|Writing an essay on "the iron men" by farley mowat
2 - Good evening :) Congratulations on going back to school! It will be a wonderful experience. First off, to...
EssayskrissygirlEF_Team5 - Nov 23, 2008
|"There is one who leads and there is one who follows." - admission essay
4 - I'm sorry, I'm not familiar with the university or their admissions procedures and requirements. Can you post the prompt...
UndergraduatektjhmjEF_Team5 - Nov 22, 2008
|I have already previewed life at Penn State and absolutely loved it - summer experience
4 - I think once you've done the mechanical/grammatical polishing, it will be a great piece. Take a deep breath and...
UndergraduateeleankelEF_Team5 - Nov 22, 2008
|"I had to reach the finish line." - Help with Prompt 2
Undergraduatelilibeth91760EF_Team5 - Nov 22, 2008
|questions on UC personal statement
2 - Good evening :) I think that answering an essay prompt with a complete sentence to begin with is...
Undergraduateskjw25EF_Team5 - Nov 22, 2008
|Biology Creative Essay
Writing Feedbackmonee2EF_Team5 - Nov 22, 2008
|Gastronomy is much more than just a hobby for me - extracurricular mini-essay
4 - Good afternoon :) As I stated before, watch what you start your sentences off with. Avoid beginning your...
Undergraduatemichel92EF_Team5 - Nov 22, 2008
|help with essay #1: experience with soup kitchen
Writing Feedbackdatanatordatanator - Nov 22, 2008
|The Indian society, help with prompt #1....
Undergraduatedatanatordatanator - Nov 22, 2008
|"our district championship" - Common App Elaboration--150 words.
Undergraduatebhangra369EF_Team5 - Nov 22, 2008
|My Undergraduate essay to FSU
2 - Good afternoon :) I think your content answers the prompt well, and it is organized, but there are...
Undergraduatelivefromthe850EF_Team5 - Nov 22, 2008
|Why Energy Engineering? - Will you review my admission essay
2 - Good morning :) As you didn't include the prompt/assignment for this piece, I have edited the first section...
UndergraduateawaazdevEF_Team5 - Nov 22, 2008
|"Helping Sebastian" - UC Prompt #1
2 - Good morning :) As you didn't include the prompt or what type of assistance you are seeking, I...
UndergraduateKaytee17EF_Team5 - Nov 22, 2008
|'art in my life' - Florida State .."Vires Artes Mores"
2 - Good morning :) Your opening is very strong; it works well. The quote highlights your meaning well; I...
Undergraduateavalleau1EF_Team5 - Nov 22, 2008
|ADVANTAGES OF CITY LIVING AND COUNTRY LIVING, can you help me with this?
NEW - Some people, say that living in the countryside is the best choice, because is better for your heath. But...
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|USC Short question - swimming activity
NEW - Tell us about an activity that is important to you, and why. To begin with, all students face...
|Grandparents had spent great portion of their hard earned saving to buy house and car for their son
Undergraduatelayaililayaili - Nov 22, 2008
|The book Ishmael - An Idea on a thesis and introduction
8 - You're welcome :) "In the book Ishmael, written by Daniel Quinn, Ishmael consistently shows how our civilized society...
Book ReportsboonsterEF_Team5 - Nov 21, 2008
|essay about experience
6 - I think it's great in regards to content and readability; your organization and structure look good as well. The...
Undergraduatem5456EF_Team5 - Nov 21, 2008
|The Super Student, a person who had an influence on me - admission essay
Undergraduateeagle6002eagle6002 - Nov 21, 2008
|Cross Country; most exhilarating experience; Extracurricular Activity
2 - Good afternoon :) "For me, Cross CountryThese are not proper nouns and shouldn't be capitalized. has been one...
Undergraduateeagle6002EF_Team5 - Nov 21, 2008
|'I was two months pregnant' - A decision that has changed my life
2 - Make sure you are capitalizing the first words of every sentence. "so" should be capitalized. At this point...
Writing FeedbackTMcGeeEF_Team5 - Nov 21, 2008
|Jackie essay - Demolish my essay or work with it.
3 - I think if you explain to your audience that responsibility is reflected in your life now, that will be...
Undergraduatejenchow1992EF_Team5 - Nov 21, 2008
|Graduate Essay-Why do we need a Semiotic Methodology of Theatre? UNFINISHED
2 - Good afternoon :) As this is not within my area of expertise, I have made comments in regards...
GraduatecarlajayneEF_Team5 - Nov 21, 2008