|Winter break in my sophomore year / Ronald Regan - UF Admissions essay
2 - Good afternoon. I liked the second one better; it seemed more appropriate for the prompt: "It was...
Undergraduateandii1018EF_Team5 - Oct 5, 2008
|Nameless Girl - An essay about someone who has made an impact on...
12 - calend4r, I agree; it's much nicer when we've got the whole picture. Regards, Gloria Moderator, EssayForum.com...
Undergraduateeric0060EF_Team5 - Oct 5, 2008
|Modern brigade de cuisine system..
Writing Feedbackeng1EF_Team5 - Oct 5, 2008
|Expierence that caused you to learn something - Narrowing to a topic
Essayssouthernmommy76EF_Team5 - Oct 5, 2008
|"I spent 5 years in prison" - Experience that is meaningful for me
2 - Great essay. Be careful of the format of your dialogue; each speaker gets his/her own line; that's how your...
Undergraduate4ever2bleedEF_Team5 - Oct 5, 2008
|outside of the bubble that I live,good choice of topic and first paragraph?
2 - Good morning. I think this is a very good topic choice and your introductory paragraph lays the groundwork...
UndergraduatebullyEF_Team5 - Oct 5, 2008
|Comparing Christine and Penny essay
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|Victoria Junior College "Talents & Achievements" Section
NEW - In not more than 300 words, describe the talents and skills you have which you think set you apart...
|my ability to do a wide variety of things successfully - UCF Essays
NEW - These are my first admission essays so I could really use some help. Thanks. 4.What qualities or unique...
|Qualities or unique characteristics do you possess. Not only fingerprints..
3 - Thank you for your corrections and comments. It means a lot to me that you liked it. Thank you....
Undergraduate4ever2bleed4ever2bleed - Oct 4, 2008
|The hardworking and successful person - UCF application
NEW - Why did you choose to apply to UCF? "The University of Central Florida is one of the best universities...
|'enthusiastic, mature, hardworking individual' - my personal statement on my cv
2 - Good afternoon. What is the prompt/requirements for this essay? Thank you. Regards, Gloria Moderator, EssayForum.com...
UndergraduateAngel123456EF_Team5 - Oct 4, 2008
|"Designing a hero" - essay about Linda Segers, "Creating the Myth"
2 - Good afternoon. Because this essay deals with specific material that you and your classmates have exclusive access to...
Writing Feedbacksweetcherokee74EF_Team5 - Oct 4, 2008
|Boston University Essay - I have always dreamed abou this school
2 - Good afternoon. Please see my grammatical and mechanical comments on the Carnegie Mellon essay, because the same issues...
UndergraduatemihirmjEF_Team5 - Oct 4, 2008
|Top Rank, Medicine, Infrastructure; why I have chosen Carnegie Mellon?
2 - This reads like a one-page ad for the university. While singing the praises of your school of choice is...
UndergraduatemihirmjEF_Team5 - Oct 4, 2008
|My teachers and the teacher's day - essay
NEW - Students and teachers are always on the different bank of the lake. Just like how it goes in my...
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|"Soprano, alto, tenor, bass!" - Davidson Essay (for Common App)
NEW - I am using the Common App for Davidson College, and my essay topic is choice #1 (Identify a significant...
|"my mother couldn't support all of us financially" - Obstacles in my life
NEW - Please describe in detail you have faced in your life. If your adversity is strictly financial need, please describe...
|Rogerian Essay: A Letter to My Parents
3 - Actually, this essay requirement is to convince someone in a nicely way, under a letter form. I chose the...
Letterstaiyakitaiyaki - Oct 3, 2008
|Arts Management Essays
2 - Good morning. I suggest that you highlight your strengths. Open the essay letting your reader know that even...
Graduateluskak96EF_Team5 - Oct 3, 2008
|UCF App. Essays - two separate statements on two topics?
3 - Thank you so much for clarifying, I was really stressing out about it since their rolling admission started awhile...
Essaysbmth315bmth315 - Oct 2, 2008
|Common App Writing - local baseball field crew membership
2 - I think this is a very honest and honorable essay. You describe what you have done and how you...
UndergraduatebullyEF_Team5 - Oct 2, 2008
|The World I Come From - College required essay
3 - It is where discovery and logic are tools waged to create understanding. I reside at the nexus of these...
UndergraduateJustJoshinbyJEF_Team5 - Oct 2, 2008
|FU essay - people could just let their lives fall to piece
|"I have never had a musical bone in my body" - common app essay
6 - You are right, and while "I" did not write the paper, "I" do not know what the prompt/requirements were,...
UndergraduateupaEF_Team5 - Oct 2, 2008
|Helping people is my passion ; NEOUCOM - what would you contribute?
UndergraduateSchoubeySchoubey - Oct 1, 2008
|"the horrible quasi-suicide incident"; /Common App
2 - Excellent essay. Grammatically and mechanically pretty clean, and your point is very poignantly made. It flows well, is organized,...
UndergraduateWankmasterEF_Team5 - Oct 1, 2008
|Pharmacy school essay - participation in Mercer's Doctor of Pharmacy
4 - Good afternoon. Unfortunately, posting them here on the forum is the only way I can receive them so...
Graduateht43verEF_Team5 - Oct 1, 2008
|"I am unique" - UCF admission; UCF community
3 - erotondo09 has a good point; you could leave the sentence as "I will do everything in my pwoer to...
UndergraduateYellowRosesEF_Team5 - Oct 1, 2008
|"I have been in that very arena many times" - FSU admissions essay
3 - It is absolutely a good thing. The more secure and confident you are in your writing, the more confident...
UndergraduatepnkpolkadottzEF_Team5 - Oct 1, 2008