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3 - Good evening :) I think you have done a fantastic job answering this prompt. You have described the...
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2 - Good evening :) First, avoid contractions in formal academic writing; for instance, "It's" should be "It is." ...
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2 - Good evening :) I have edited one section of your piece and then provided some general comments in...
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2 - I'm not really sure about the content of your essay. Have you been to college already and majored in...
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2 - Good afternoon :) I have edited the first section and then made some more general comments in regards...
UndergraduatefrubanEF_Team5 - Nov 19, 2008
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6 - In regards to content, I'm not sure really where you are going with it. In the introduction you talk...
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|Cause and Effect Essay-A Family of Poverty
5 - Don't tell the reader, that you're going to tell him something. Like, " I will describe what my poverty...
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|The Freedom to Choose Death
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|"trying for the best university in the world" - Uc Prompt #2
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|FU Essay - Significant experience/Achievement - Revisions Needed
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|'Growing up I hated to read' - Fashion Institute of Technology essay
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|Taking action against moral injustice - English Essay Gr. 12 Level
3 - You're very welcome. This is a very importance stance, and this sentence needs to be included somewhere in...
Writing FeedbackGeistEF_Team5 - Nov 18, 2008
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2 - First, make sure your words and sentences aren't redundant. For example, "I started thinking about how I felt before...
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|"DARPA Grand Challenge" - Lehigh Short Essay
2 - Good evening :) I won't ever "tear you down." :) Constructive criticism, now, that's my forte :) ...
Undergraduatevaibhav2614EF_Team5 - Nov 18, 2008
|"the happy and healthy world" -UC essays #1 and #2
2 - Good afternoon :) In regards to the first piece, as long as it fits the word count requirement,...
UndergraduateAsapirs23EF_Team5 - Nov 18, 2008
|"I can never know everything, but with what I know, I can accomplish anything" - essay check
2 - Good evening :) I have provided some general comments in regards to mechanics in this piece. First,...
Undergraduatepinks1026EF_Team5 - Nov 18, 2008
|comparing essay: Machiavelli & Sheikh Mohamad Bin Rashid
4 - Good afternoon :) That is where your brainstorming comes in; the "hard work" of the assignment. Try brainstorming...
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2 - Good afternoon :) See me comments on your other postings in regards to mechanical corrections, as they apply...
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|Persuasive Essay Abu Graib Prison Camp-Need Help
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6 - I see. I've edited the first section and then made some general comments in regards to the rest of...
Writing FeedbackmissfilanEF_Team5 - Nov 17, 2008
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7 - Try avoiding heavy condescension. As far as I know, UCs do not like to see this (it's too negative)....
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2 - Good evening :) First, some mechanical comments. Avoid using contractions in formal academic writing; instead of "it's," write...
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|From China - with College Education - Jacksonville University essay revise.
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