Question 2. Would you please tell us about a few of your favorite books, poems, authors, films, plays, pieces of music, musicians, performers, paintings, artists, magazines, or newspapers? Feel free to touch on one, some, or all of the categories listed, or add a category of your own.
The Kite Runner, written by Khaled Hosseini, told a story that was forever etched in my mind. In Afghanistan, Amir was attacked by Assef because of his friendship with Hassan, who is a hazara (inferior race). Without hesitation, loyal Hassan stood up to Assef and threatened to shoot his eye with a slingshot. During a local kite fighting tournament, Hassan chases after Amir's last cut kite but runs into Assef and his gang. Refusing to give up the kite, Hassan was cruelly raped by the 3 boys. Amir witnessed the rape but was too scared to step forward. Later on, Amir who was ashamed of his cowardice distanced himself from Hassan and even framed him for theft. Soon the Russians invaded Afghanistan; Amir and his father escapes to California. One day, Amir learns the fate of his childhood friend, Hassan, who had a wife and a son. However, His wife and he were murdered by the Taliban when they refused to give up Amir's house. Amir rescued their son, Sohrab, and took him to America.
This book illustrated many themes like love and betrayal, guilt and redemption, cowardice and bravery, regret and salvation. It was especially provocative during the rape scene of Hassan when Amir chose to do nothing. A stab of pain pierced through me as I felt pity for poor Hassan who was too loyal for his own good. To Amir, I was shaken with anger and contempt. How could anyone be so heartless and ungrateful? His despicable act of spinning a tale to his father about Hassan stealing exacerbated my sentiments towards him. However, as the story continues, my perception of Amir slowly changes when he tries to redeem himself by looking for Hassan's son. Through this book, I also caught a glimpse of the ugliness of war in Afghanistan. A sense of gratitude towards the Singapore government arose in me as I thanked them deep in my heart for the strong defense and 24/7 security. Unfortunately, not everyone is able to enjoy the safe and peaceful environment like I do.
How can I improve? any errors? Thank you!
This is fairly solid. A couple of tips, though. When describing events in a book, it is customary to use the present tense, rather than the past tense, so you should alter your tenses throughout to match that convention. If you have more room, you might also want to go into a bit more detail about the connection between the background (war-torn Afghanistan) and the theme of redemption, but it isn't strictly necessary.
Good writing often involves themes that are threaded together, and that continue throughout the whole essay. If you want to make a very strong impression, you can make it so that a single theme is present throughout most aspects of the essay. So, instead of just describing things, you use them as examples of redemption (or some other theme).