thesis statement for "the count of monte cristo" theme essay

this is what i have, is this a good thesis statement?
(my theme is revenge)

Justification in revenge is only enjoyed by the revenged themselves, whether the revenge was taken to its wanted maxima or over the limit, so this would mean, how far would Edmond Dantès go with his revenge?

maybe put who the person is that Dantes is going to get back.

Please help with my topic: compare/contrast...mom and dad

It seems like you might be under the impression that a thesis statement has to be written in a complex way. That is not true. The thesis has to be clear, not complex:

Justification in revenge --- what do you mean by justification?

Maybe you mean this:
Revenge is only enjoyable for the person taking revenge...
...but that has nothing to do with your question. Maybe you want to argue that Dante took his revenge too far and that he went too far because of his __________.

Now that I think about it, I think "satisfaction" would be a better fit than "justifaction"
& I don't think Dantes went too far with his revenge, even though he has a thought that he did take it to far when a innocent child was murdered.

Do you think this is better/more simple?:

The satisfaction in revenge is only enjoyed by Dantès himself, whether the revenge was taken to its wanted maxima or it went too far.

Yes, getting better for sure.

I see what you mean about satisfaction...


So, your main point is the fact that nobody else enjoyed the revenge? Is that really your main idea?

Oh... I just realized I am familiar with the story! Um... is it too obvious to observe that no one else enjoyed it other than him? Is that meaningful? If not, what is it that makes his vengeance meaningful and unique?

You can try this technique:

Write a paragraph about a scene, and discuss it thoughtfully.
Repeat that process for 5 paragraphs
Go back and write an intro with a thesis statement based on whatever observations you made while writing those paragraphs.

It is a great trick. :-)