Before I have uploaded the following proposal here. Though, this time it was corrected and even reformulated in a more powerful way, I think, as you've suggested. I can't have any chance to ask some native speaker to read it. Is it then possible to let it correct one more time? I hope so. Many thanks in advance.
Critique and Communism
Crisis of Synthesis and Communist Subject: Kant and Marx
I. Key Research Questions
(Kant & Marx in Late Capitalism)
The following research was motivated by a global phenomenon "working poor" as a new form of poverty. Firstly it reflects the malfunction of the trinity between labour, commodity and money in capitalistic market. Additionally it leads to the phase of capitalism, namely capitalism without labour/ worker. Then, regarding the frame of subject-form it impulses us to think urgently about the way how to subjectivate the excess, or the possible subject-form of the excess which never could be represented or counted by the Marxian relation between proletariat and bourgeosie as well as by the republican notion such as citizen(ship) at all.
Based on this actual issue, the following research reposes a forgotten question in the tradition of Western Marxism, in particular of Critical Theory: as ever posed by Sohn-Rethel and critically approached by Marcuse, the question is as follows: "Is transcendental philosophy capable of grounding the social recognition and experience as well?" In other words, could the transcendental categories reflect themselves under the influence of social reality? Or, on the part of organ (tool and mediator alike) of knowledge, to what extent does the transcendental subject share reality in common with others, albeit neither as an empirical nor as a pathological one? My answer to this question that is to be developed in this paper is: "The Transcendental Marxism (cf. Max Adler) is possible and even necessary today, only insofar as it presupposes and handles crisis of the transcendental, vis-ŕ-vis the empirical." In other words, my question peculiarly focuses, as far as the transcendental method is concerned, on thought abstraction (Denkabstraktion) of concrete actuality into universal possibility by bracketing the first one. At the same time ....
You English is clear and sophisticated. However, when you explain your focus here it is not very clear. Whenever you deal with complex subject matter, make sure you use short, clear, simple sentences to make your points. "possible and even necessary..." What does this mean? Does it mean "applicable?" It is applicable today "only if it handles the crisis of the transcendental." I think it is important to add a sentence that will make the reader really understand the meaning you intend.
I have to remove the rest of the material from EsayForum, because i found it on "blog.naver.com"... is that your blog? We have to be very careful to avoid plagiarism at EssayForum. Please don't post any material here if it appears somewhere else on the Internet. :-/
Your English is solid, but I think you should try harder to clearly express the main idea you are tackling. Sometimes, complex subject matter and complex sentences can make a situation in which you do not actually have a clear message/concept to share with the reader.
Thanks for posting, I'm sorry I had to remove it!
