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WHY ANTICIPATE OVER TOMORROW?


mussy 5 / 17 1  
May 26, 2013   #1
Need help on making this poem better. criticism is welcomed

That tomorrow brings a better day,
Its all in God's hand
Then why anticipate over what the future has in stock for you.
The moment is all you've got and you have all you have to spend the moment lavishly so that the future won't come as a surprise to you.
Henno1 1 / 2  
May 26, 2013   #2
That tomorrow brings a better day,
Its all in God's hand
Then why anticipate over what the future has in stock for you.
The moment is all you've got and you have all you have to spend the moment lavishly so that the future won't come as a surprise to you.

why do you use its in (its all in God's hand) just (all in God's hand)
Then why anticipate over what the future has in stock for you.
i would say : Then why anticipate over what stocked in future,
Didgeridoo - / 306 191  
May 26, 2013   #3
Tomorrow will bring a better day.
It's all in God's hands
So why worry about what the future has in store for you?
The moment is all you've got
Spend the moment lavishly so that the future won't come as a surprise to you.
Marz13 2 / 1  
May 26, 2013   #4
Tomorrow awaits a better day,
It's all in God's hands
Why contemplate your future?
This moment is all you have
Spend the moment lavishly (so that the future won't come as a surprise to you.)

(I don't know how I feel about the ending. The future won't come as a surprise to you)


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