mussy 5 / 17 1 May 26, 2013 #1Need help on making this poem better. criticism is welcomedThat tomorrow brings a better day,Its all in God's handThen why anticipate over what the future has in stock for you.The moment is all you've got and you have all you have to spend the moment lavishly so that the future won't come as a surprise to you.
Henno1 1 / 2 May 26, 2013 #2That tomorrow brings a better day,Its all in God's handThen why anticipate over what the future has in stock for you.The moment is all you've got and you have all you have to spend the moment lavishly so that the future won't come as a surprise to you.why do you use its in (its all in God's hand) just (all in God's hand)Then why anticipate over what the future has in stock for you.i would say : Then why anticipate over what stocked in future,
Didgeridoo - / 306 191 May 26, 2013 #3Tomorrow will bring a better day.It's all in God's handsSo why worry about what the future has in store for you?The moment is all you've gotSpend the moment lavishly so that the future won't come as a surprise to you.
Marz13 2 / 1 May 26, 2013 #4Tomorrow awaits a better day,It's all in God's handsWhy contemplate your future?This moment is all you haveSpend the moment lavishly (so that the future won't come as a surprise to you.)(I don't know how I feel about the ending. The future won't come as a surprise to you)