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Effects of having a baby..(Cause & Effect paper)

Aug 9, 2010   #1
Hi, I really need help on how to start my thesis statement and on to the next paragraph...

I was told by my Doctor that I would never be able to conceive due to some of my medical problems. On the day I turned twenty-seven, life took me by suprise when I found out I was pregnant. Having a baby effected me in many ways by spiritually, financially and psychologically.

Having a baby effected me in many ways by spiritually, financially and psychologically

To me, this sounds like your thesis statement. One thing I would recommend is for you to elaborate on your introduction. Perhaps describe how the doctor's news that you could not conceive affected you.

On the day I turned twenty-seven

Really? :) A nice birthday present

Well, your thesis arranges your essay for you.
Try to list out the different ways (specific examples) that your conception affected you. Then categorize them as 'spiritually', 'financially, etc...
There, you should have three paragraphs. This could give you a good start.
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Aug 10, 2010   #3
Use affected instead of effected. "effect" is a noun, and "affect" is a verb.

You should change this sentence:
Having a baby affected me in many ways: spiritually, financially, and psychologically.
Having a baby affected me spiritually, financially and psychologically.

I bet it certainly did! Most importantly, it probably gives you special insight into the nature of reality and human life.

Your thesis statement must be a sentence that is worth a whole essay. It is like the ruler of the essay... the queen bee. It is the sentence that the essay was written for.

Do you know what I mean? You have an insight you want to share, so you express it in a sentence and then give 3 supporting paragraphs. Then, you write a nice thoughtful conclusion. But the thesis is the backbone of the essay. YOU have to decide what your thesis is. If you were in a conversation about this topic, what would you say to contribute meaningfully to the conversation? When you write a scholarly paper, you are contributing to a conversation.

Also, google this:
how to write a cause and effect essay

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