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Essay on what happened in st.petersburg, russian in january 22, 1904


kimty 7 / 14  
Feb 22, 2008   #1
Hi, i have to act as a reporter and say what happened in st.petersburg, russian in january 22, 1904. can you please edit my work. my teacher always says that i have to use big words. Can u please try to add some big words in it.

For many years workers have been treated extremely terriblely. They have been overburned with work, insulted, and treated as slaves. They have never been considered human beings. And finally this afternoon they took a step forward and head to the Winter Palance to meet Nicholas II for justice and protection. Over 200,00 workers were presented in front of the winter palance. The officers quarding the palace told the worker to leave right away. When the workers denied that, they got angry and stared to fire shots in the air. When they saw no reaction of the crowd, they stared to shot fires directly in the crowd. Which killed five hundread of people and wounded thousands. This horrible incident has left the entire nation shoked. Our latest reports tells us that Nicholad II was not presented in St. Petersburg while this all this happend but still many people consider him the reason this bloody day.
EF_Team2 1 / 1,708  
Feb 23, 2008   #2
Greetings!

I did some editing for you and threw in some big words, too. ;-)

For many years, workers have been treated contemptuously. They have been overburdened with work, insulted, and treated as slaves. They have never been considered human beings, instead being treated as sub-human beasts. And finally, this afternoon, they took a step forward and headed to the Winter Palace to meet Nicholas II to demand justice and protection. Over 20,000 workers swarmed in front of the winter palace. The officers guarding the palace ordered the workers to leave immediately. When the workers protested, the officers became angry and started to fire shots in the air. When they saw no reaction from the crowd, the palace guards began to fire shots directly into the crowd, killing five hundred people and wounding thousands. This tragic incident has left the entire nation shocked. Our latest reports tell us that Nicholas II was not present in St. Petersburg while this all this transpired, but still many people consider him the person responsible for this bloody day.

I hope this helps!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com
OP kimty 7 / 14  
Feb 23, 2008   #3
Thank you soo much Sarah


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