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Specialization in one sport at an early age


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Apr 23, 2019   #1

involvement in one subtype of a sport



Some parents feel that involvement in just one sport helps their children to be very skilled and competitive. This idea has both positive and negative effects. On one hand, there are a number of benefits when parents encourage students to specialize in one sport. Firstly, early specialization will help children gain more experience to the sport and become more advanced because they have more time to practice. Therefore, they can easily reach goals and compete with other children. In addition, training in childhood is the most beneficial effect because this makes them get used to movements. In my opinion, however, there are many disadvantages of concentrating on one sport. The first drawback is it will prevent kids from expanding their other interests and children will not know in which they have the most talent. Besides, a child playing only one sport can become tired and rundown, possibly causing a desire to quit. In conclusion, early specialization in just one sport has advantages and disadvantages.
Maria - / 1,098 389  
Apr 23, 2019   #2
You can improve your essay through incorporating more substantiated content in its entirety. Try to evade laziness when it comes to being descriptive (ie. using words such as very when there are alternative options that can express this in a clearer manner). Try to also maximize the space that you have for your essay; this pertains to using more concise language to be able to adjust your essay accordingly. When you are constructing your essay, keep in mind that it is for academic standards. This means that you should always try to incorporate different techniques and style to showcase a grasp of the language.

For instance, if I were to revise the first lines of your essay, I would put it this way:
There are parents who believe that involving their children in just one sport would help them excel competitively in the field. This notion has to be discussed from two sides: positive and negative.

Notice how I had mentioned that the children would excel competitively - instead of just saying that they would be very skilled and competitive. While the latter tells the story as well, the former appears to be more straightforward with what you would want to happen.

Watch out for your usage of preposition. I have noticed that, in your third sentence, the word you are looking for is that they would gain more experience in the sport (not to the sport because it is not a movement towards it, rather is incorporating the skills in the act itself). Knowing these nuisances can help your essay become more meaningful.

Try to crack down your sentences into smaller content; this will help you become more direct. For instance, in your fifth to the last sentence, it should be written as:

In addition, early childhood training would reap the most benefits because of how it trains them to get used to the movements.

Keep in mind these comments the next time you write. Best of luck!


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