My Smith College Application Essay needs some major work! I would be grateful for any suggestions and grammatical corrections.
What specific aspects of Smith College will better meet your academic goals?
My academic goal is to achieve my PhD in Psychology and acquire a background in education so that I can establish a private practice for children. The purpose of my practice would be to assist children with mental or emotional illness with their day-to-day living skills and provide the necessary support and resources for them to accomplish their personal goals. My interest in this field started when I was able to recognize my sister's struggle with the symptoms of Asperger's Syndrome. I have since become passionate about this field because of the great impact it can have on individuals with mental or emotional illness and their families.
With Smith College's open curriculum I can freely explore many of my academic interests while remaining focused on psychology. Having such an exposure to a wide range of academic areas will set me apart from other students perusing the same career path. The unparalleled faculty of professors and small faculty-to- student ratio ensures that all members of the community are fully engaged and generating their best work. This fully engaged environment is what I have been longing for since starting my college career, because I flourish and become confident in my own potential in such an environment.
Unlike many colleges and universities a classroom would not confine my learning experiences at Smith College. I am strongly interested participating in an internship within or related to the field of psychology and feel that attending Smith will aid me to these opportunities and therefore potential jobs after college. The Smith College Campus School is also very appealing to me, because I would like to learn more regarding developmental education to better understand and relate to my future patients. The countless clubs and organizations available on campus would further allow me to explore my academic and personal interest while becoming socially engaged. Finally, the housing arrangements are set up so uniquely, including such a diverse group, that I would develop personally through my house encounters.
I firmly believe we all have a responsibility to pay it forward in order for all to prosper and we do this by donating our entire life to our own passions. Smith College will provide me with a diverse education filled with opportunities to which I vow to indulge in fully and convey my experiences through my practice. I know that Smith College is a perfect fit for me because of its liberal structure, countless opportunities and diversity.