I have prepared my essay according to the following instructions, Please evaluate the essay for me.
The university demands for an essay of max. 250 words, whereas my essay size has reached to 310 words.
Do advise me on trimming the size.A well written letter of motivation will focus on
yourself, and describe points that explain, in your own words, why you want to further your studies
in this programme, and how your interests and skills will contribute to your success in it, and to your
future career. You can think in the following questions:
ïˇ Why are you interested in this programme and in the specialization option and mobility
ïˇ What are your career intentions and why are you interested in pursuing those career
ïˇ What accomplishments in your academic, professional, or other related experience are you
most proud of and why?
ïˇ How would a Master's Degree in this programme help you fulfil your future plans?
Your letter of motivation must be written in English and be maximum of 250 words.
As a child, I was always fascinated by how giant wheels, airplanes and automobiles work. This curiosity in machines increased as years passed by, and it was no surprise when I decided to pursue my undergraduate studies in Mechanical Engineering. At the end of 3 years of my bachelor studies, I belong to the top 5% of my department and I have also been nominated for a scholarship.
My inclination towards exploring new pathways in engineering helped me to prepare 2 research papers which were published in proceedings of International Conferences. This achievement has instilled confidence in me and has encouraged me to pursue a master's program. I have completed certified courses in Auto-Cad, Catia and Ansys from reputed institutes. I have also completed my industrial internship at LOPSL, Solapur. Working in the manufacturing and the assembly department, I got hands on experience in production, assembly and inspection of various pumps. Currently, I am working on my final year project "Design and Kinematic Analysis of Shoulder Joint", an interdisciplinary project which combines the study of biology along with mechanical engineering. In addition to this, I'm also assisting Prof. xxx with his doctoral project "Manufacturing of Low Cost CPM Machine".
xxx is a well structured and challenging program combined with an excellent opportunity to study in reputed consortium universities. The specialization option "Aeromechanical and Material Design" matches with my interest, where I can apply my strong design, materials and CAD/CAE knowledge to explore various research opportunities in turbomachinery applied in automobiles and power generation sectors. With growing energy crisis, focus on improved lightweight turbomachines to improve the power generation efficiency is need of the hour.
My technical preparation and background, combined with hardwork, zeal and perseverance will enable me to excel in the xxx program at the xxx and its consortium universities.