Please provide your valuable feedback, I'd really appreciate it. I am applying to the same program in multiple colleges so I will modify corresponding content for each college.
PERSONAL ESSAY
1.What draws you to the field of interaction design right now?
Observing my father work as a medical physician for my entire life, I believe he creates healthy meaningful and best experiences for people. The course of his communication with people to understand them, explain to them and basically help them really stirred me. I always had to bet against my parents' wishes to involve myself in art classes since my childhood days. I love how pictures are conceived from the human mind to the paper or screen. My imagination tied up with computers when I was sitting in my first computer lab class in middle school. I was amazed at computers functioning with a small piece of information. After high school graduation, even though failing to breeze into field of medicine I joined for summer computer classes with continuous exhilaration from my father.
Positively, I chose computer engineering for my undergraduate studies. During the first year of my college, as the class representative I coordinated various cultural activities. I won accolades by attending inter-college and intra-college paper presentations, activities, workshops. Productive opportunities like such helped me to interact with mindsets of diverse backgrounds in engineering. I received my first job offer from Wipro Technologies Ltd on campus for the role of software Engineer in my pre-final year. For my final year project work, I studied on the research topic 'Organization of Documents using Tree View Self Organizing Map' along with my team, provided by our graduate professor Dr. B.Mahalakshmi. Our work essentially focused on pre-processing of data using Java where the non-plain text documents in input data have to be parsed into plain text, later some feature terms are chosen and extracted to represent the documents in a phase called indexing. The frequency of occurrence of each word from each document is recorded in a words-documents matrix using MATLAB.
Following graduation, I successfully completed my 3-month internship technology training program at Wipro where we studied practical development of web applications using Java, DBMS, SQL. In my first year of joining as a full-fledged Software Engineer, I received the 'Best Rookie of the Year' award for my work in resolving ghost pattern in Walmart Client transaction logs.
During my last year in Wipro, I advanced upon 'User Interface' while supporting a Responsive Web Design project for all devices as a functionality developer. Little did I knew, there is whole new world of 'User Experience Design' and I needed to learn more about creating user experiences for digital interfaces professionally. In an exceedingly design driven world, I strongly believe that studying about client needs is the key to develop valuable information systems or products.
What are your hopes and dreams as a designer and future leader?
In order to actualize my newly found discovery, I decided to jumpstart my learning curve with enrolling in BITS Pilani's PG Certification Program in 'Big Data Engineering' which is a one-year online program profoundly focusing on the foundations, different platforms, processing, analytics of big data, concluding with a capstone project. The program is loaded with prestigious faculties such as Sundar S. Balasubramaniam and expertise of some top industry experts along with tons of practical problems and industry applications. I started self-learning about the industrial tools involved in Web Design like HTML, CSS, Illustrator, Photoshop etc. alongside doing personal projects and securing a graphic design Internship for 'CollCom' a youth driven non-profit students' community organization by Jawaharlal Nehru University Delhi.
Consequently, this has influenced me to learn about the core UX process of taking an idea from paper to a tested and a usable product, the approach and methods followed behind researching people's psychology. As a future Product Designer, I hope to engage with other designers and work together towards implementing simple and effective design solutions for difficult problems. Ultimately, helping people who are not satisfied with designs and make lives easier.Holt Educational Consultant - / 14,801 
4780 I have reviewed your essay and come to the conclusion that you are not delivering the required prompt requirements. The question asks you to explain your current interest in Interaction Design. It is not asking for your educational background, nor the influence of your parents on your career decisions. This is not a personal statement but a statement of purpose. Therefore, the discussion should address the following information:
1. Your college background in relation to your interest in Interaction Design. Mention your college academic accomplishments whenever possible.
2. College thesis project and its relation to your increased interest in this field.
3. Professional experience in relation to developing your skills as an Interactive Designer.
4. Your perception of your professional weak points that could have drawn you to further develop your skills in this field.
5. How you hope to improve and contribute to the future of Interaction Design based on this program.
Your response to the hopes and dreams prompt is yet another example of your ability to misinterpret the prompt requirements. You are being asked to visualize the kind of development and improvements that you hope to contribute for the betterment of your profession. How do you see Interaction Design becoming a pivotal field for advertising, social media, or virtual reality in the future? How do you think that this can be achieved? Your idea as to how you can contribute to the future of Interaction Design will be response to the "hopes and dreams" part of the question. The future leader part, will all depend upon how you see yourself as a professional within 5 years after completing the program. Where will you be as a professional by then? If you see yourself as a business owner, what sort of service do you hope to offer that will set your company apart of the others, thus establishing you as a leader in this field?
I have offered you guidelines for both prompts that, if you manage to follow to the letter, will help you develop a more responsive statement for your application.
