From spending time as a student athletic trainer taping ankles, to learning the proper protocol for an total hip replacement, or simply listening to a patient as they explain why they came into the doctor's office.
This looks like a sentence fragment.
During these experiences, my passion was more than clear as I continued to develop the motivation necessary for a career in medicine.
I thought this was a weird sentence. Why would you need motivation if you're passionate about something?
Along with these experiences my mentors have taught me great intellect, which has enhanced my maturity as I continue my journey through the education of health care.
Don't use vague phrases like "great intellect." Specifically say what you learned.
I have learned that medicine is more than just the science or art of healing, but it is merely about compassion and the sharing of knowledge calmly with patients.
There's something wrong with this sentence. How is this for a revision :-
"I have learned that medicine is more than just the science or art of healing. It is also about compassion and the sharing of knowledge calmly with patients.
After much health care exposure, I believe my personality lies along with the duties of a physician assistant.
How? Substantiate this claim with an example.
As a physician assistant you
It's better to avoid the second person in this type of essay.