This new version shows a great improvement over the previous version. You have really considered everything that you want to say in the essay and did your best to express yourself well. But I found just a few more portions that you need to either edit or revise in order to further improve the paper. I hope these changes continue to help you :-)
My choice to seek a career in
to the healthcare field arose ...
The loss of my maternal grandparents over a period of
just six months placed a
new challenge in front of me. I had
the unexpected role as caregiver
- ... I had
an unexpected role as ...
As a nursing assistant in a memory care unit, I was challenged
with patients suffering from neurological ...
One day, that became very apparent to me.- ... I was challenged by my patients ...
That became very apparent to me one day.... remembered the details leading up to the moment the code was called.
I waited with the patient until the team could arrive , while his body shook uncontrollably.
- my partner
left the room in a panic.
I waited with the patient until the team arrived.Being a physician would afford me the challenges
- Being a Physician
Assistant ...
afford me the challenges I am looking for but physicians tend to have limited time for actual patient ...
- ... looking
for because physicians tend to ...
most appealing to me due to the lifelonglearning challenges
- lifelong
patient-care challenges...
I truly believe physician assistantsto b e the new heart of medical care
- ... assistants
are the new...