The choice that I made to become successful: Personal Statement

I really need your help in this personal statement of mine please.
With the prompt asking;
the personal statement should include your interest and experience in this subject area; your reasons for choosing this particular course; your future aim or career plan; how the course of study connects to your future plans. But there is no word count limit setted by the university.

it's the best choice that I made

It had been the long ambition of mine to study and work on the field of wireless and telecommunication world in order to be part of the emerging technology. This driving force in addition to the skills and experience I attain, present interest I have for upgrading my knowledge and need for the success of my plans encouraged me to pursue my postgraduate study in wireless and telecommunication systems.

Even if I took wireless and telecommunication courses during my undergraduate study, the knowledge I gained during my internship time at a broadcasting media was crucial. At that time the agency was rebuilding every technical areas using communication equipment of latest technologies. By that time I had an opportunity to introduce myself with new wireless communication from theoretical and practical point of views with the help of peoples who came from the manufacturing companies abroad to implant the components and making them functional.

This was further expanded during the final year of my undergraduate study in doing my thesis on the application of wireless communication system and the various researches I had reviewed made me to be much more interested to the field, I even can say it was the main turning point for the current research and study interest I have.

Due to my interest I did continue my masters study on communication systems engineering which gave me an opportunity to explore more of wireless and mobile communication, telecommunication, digital signal processing, radio frequency designs and other core areas of the field. I had done my thesis work on RF spectrum efficiency analysis with the help of cognitive radio network which combines wireless and telecommunication areas.

With what I had until now I have a future short term plans after graduation that are; continue being a lecturer and doing problem solving researches on wireless and telecommunication area for the betterment of life of the society. Also in the long run, I have a plan to work on a project that uses wireless communication to the medical application in having a wireless based real time health monitoring system. for the patients at far distance from the very few available specialists and few fully equipped infrastructures, so as to contribute in upgrading the service provision of health sector.

However, due to the limited resources and facilities available at my area it is difficult to achieve my plans which lead me to the need of further study of the field that I am interested in with a place in a much better facility.

University of Liverpool, a world leading Research University on the Electrical and Electronics Engineering field, is the best choice that I made to study the course I am interested in, that is, Wireless and Telecommunication systems. The university is equipped with top quality facilities, laboratories, highly advanced with the research work that enables the students to develop theoretical, practical and research skills which is exactly what I need for the success my plans. The modules and experts available is also one big factor that made the university an ideal place for my field of study.

Being a student in this university would provide me an opportunity to be part of one of the research groups that the university organized on the area of my interests that is the signal processing and communication group to work on a research with a partner organizations of the university. This will boost my knowledge and skills not only to become successful on my future research and project plans but also it would give me a chance to have my own little contribution too.

Studying at a postgraduate level is challenging, however, with the glimpse of knowledge and work experience and ambition I had supported by the facilities and everything I would attain from the university would lead me to the success of my study and career plans. (643 words)

Hiwot, let me see if I can better direct this essay for you in order to be more prompt specific. You need to be short but informative at all times, even if the university did not set a word limit on the essay because the reviewer does not have the time to read long essays that are more explanatory than informative in nature. Let me get started below:

include your interest and experience in this subject area
- I took wireless and telecommunication courses during my undergraduate study. I followed my undergraduate studies with masters study on communication systems engineering at XXX university last XXXX (mention if you graduated with honors or recognition). My thesis was entitled "Title here" related to the application of wireless communication system in the field of XXX. my thesis work on RF spectrum efficiency ... telecommunication areas.. my internship time at a broadcasting media was crucial (name the company, the length of your internship, what your responsibilities were and what you learned specifically from the experience).

your reasons for choosing this particular course
- explore more of wireless and mobile communication...areas of the field.

your future aim or career plan
- short term: continue being a lecturer ...life of the society.
- long term: have a plan to work on a project that uses wireless communication ... health monitoring system.
- Try to expand this explanation with more information about how you plan to achieve these short and long term plans.

how the course of study connects to your future plans
- Being a student in this university would provide me an opportunity to be part of one of the research groups that the university organized on the area of my interests that is the signal processing and communication group to work on a research with a partner organizations of the university. This will boost my knowledge and skills not only to become successful on my future research and project plans but also it would give me a chance to have my own little contribution too.

- This is a good paragraph but, it doesn't really indicate how it will connect to the future plans that you have. I suggest picking one current research from the university that you can relate to your plans and then discuss that. Present a simple thesis statement that will either help their current research improve through your participation or how you plan to develop your own project in coordination with this ongoing research.

The outline I provided above are guidelines for your improvement in the essay. You need to make sure to develop the essay in this manner so that you avoid using irrelevant word fillers that the reviewer will not find informative nor introduce more of your abilities and notable characteristics in relation to your chosen course.