Describe your background and personal/professional accomplishments, and how they demonstrate your potential for success in this degree and your career
Hi everyone, I am a working guy who wants to pursue MS in MIS from TAMU. Below is an essay written by me for the question asked by university. Kindly suggest me required changes and any other addition. As I am not from literature so it would be quite helpful to suggest me a suitable summary for the same. Thank you in advance... :)
I started my journey for my career when I came to know the use of education. In my earlier days I had no aim and was going school just for sake or one can say it was a daily routine to be followed by every boy in my village. When I reached in 9th standard, I came to know about a term "Engineer" and desperately asked my class teacher "What is an Engineer?". She replied my question with a really attractive elaboration. The time I came to know how my education can help me to grow better in future and accomplish my dreams, I started working on it. In my secondary education, I scored first division and was in top 10 students of my class. Being from a small village was a big obstacle in my higher education and I could not perform well in higher secondary education although I still got first division but I was not satisfied with it. I continued my journey for higher education with a dream of becoming a "Computer Engineer".
Furthermore, word computer might surprise you over here, as you might think how a boy from such a small village with such a backward education could dream for computer. For your kind information, I got my first computer as a gift from my father in 1998, when almost no one in my village knew the meaning of the term computer. I loved to play with it and do basic computer things with it. The quench of learning computer was growing eagerly day by day. And as a result I chose my hobby as my career. To accomplish my dream I joined The ICFAI University in 2007 to pursue my undergraduate degree in Computer Science & Engineering.
It was quite exciting when I joined college and I was fulfilled with positive energy. In first two years of B. Tech I scored above 8 out of 10 GPA and secured scholarship from my university. However, at the end of the second year a mishap happened in my family and was a cause for crestfallen in my performance. My GPA got decreased and I was depressed with such results. But as I am a person fulfilled with positive thoughts and great will power, I started working hard to recover my grads. In my final year of education, I and my friend Deepak got a chance to work with a professor from IIT Bombay (M. Tech) in his research project related to "Face detection in a static image" based on JAVA. I secured grad A in his research project and our department HOD appreciated our work and presentation for the same.
Next, in my final semester of B. Tech I joined a leading IT company as an intern and learned about practical world applications and got exposure to clients. I worked on a project called "COAS-CAB" related to INDIAN Army complain advisory department. This project gave me a chance to know and learn about military domain. In this project, we used and learned different J2EE technologies for example struts-MVC, spring, hibernate etc. This project helped me to crack the interview held at my campus placement and I secured a job in Nihilent technologies. After a fall in my grads in second year of college I recovered and scored 8.12 GPA as an aggregate.
After a long break of 4 months I joined Nihilent technologies on 3rd Oct 2011. This was a great achievement in my life for me as I took one more step toward my career accomplishment. After 3 months of joining I got a chance to lead my support team. During this time I got assessed by my HR recruitment manager, and she explained me that I was chosen to lead the project. It was a twist for me as I always kept myself prone toward technology, but from that moment onwards I started to nurture my leadership skills. I worked on different research projects under my organization's CTO Abhay sir. I accomplished these projects successfully and was appreciated by my CTO and project manager and I got excellent ratings in my appraisals.
Apart from my academic and professional skills, I have always participated in extracurricular activities held in my school, college and organization as well. I was in my college's cricket team and my team was winner in Intra University Cricket championship. I was awarded man of the match in our first match. Other than cricket I participated in 300 m race and secured 3rd position. I like to play other games like volleyball, table-tennis etc. I participated in "C-Questa", a competition held in my university for C-language, and scored 3rd position first level, because of my internal exam I couldn't participate in next level. I was a part of college cultural committee and managed few events held on cultural days in my university. In Nihilent, there is a festival named "Nihilentia", a series of events between teams of associates. I participated in Nihilentia 2011 and 12 both. I performed skit, participated in different events. In Nihilentia 2011 my team was on 3rd position, in 2012 it is on 1st. I always participate in such events proactively.
Finally, I would like to express my views for my future plans. Earlier I always wanted to pursue PhD in computer science but later when I found myself fulfilled with leadership skills as well as technical skills I started looking for proper course which can nurture both my technical and managerial skills at higher level. I ended up with MIS and started preparing for all related exams and requirements. I would say all my past achievements and academics will help me to accomplish my MS in MIS and I will utilize my skills to grow better.
I started my journey for my career when I came to know the use of education.
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In my earlier days I had no aim and was going school just for sake or one can say it was a daily routine to be followed by every boy in my village.
When I was a kid, I had no idea about my future career. As a part of daily routine, I graduated from one class to another, just like many other boys in my village.When I reached in 9th standard, I came to know about a term "Engineer" and desperately asked my class teacher "What is an Engineer?".
However, when I was in the ninth standard, I came to know about the term "Engineer" and asked my teacher who this person is.She replied my question with a really attractive elaboration. The time I came to know how my education can help me to grow better in future and accomplish my dreams, I started working on it. In my secondary education, I scored first division and was in top 10 students of my class. Being from a small village was a big obstacle in my higher education and I could not perform well in higher secondary education although I still got first division but I was not satisfied with it. I continued my journey for higher education with a dream of becoming a "Computer Engineer".
I find you try to be too much detailed in some of the parts and I guess it is not really necessary. So this is my suggestion for the above;
I still remember my fascination over her description of an engineer. That was the advent of my dream career and I took it seriously to work on it. Being a student from a small village was a significant barrier for my academic performance. However, my perseverance and determination enabled me to score a first division and became one of the top ten students. I became more and more confident in pursuing my dream career, a "Computer Engineer".