My desire to become an accountant began when I was young, because I have always had a strong interest in numbers and math in general.
^This is your opening sentence and your reader is already presented with an unrealistic, boring cliched, statement.
An interest in numbers and math in general, as a youngster, does not necessarily imply or have any relation to being an accountant.
For this reason, I am seeking a professional accounting program that will further my professional objectives and fulfill my educational requirements.
^What are your professional objectives? That is what the essay prompt is asking for.
Consequently, both my short term and long term goals reflect my desire to pursue a career in international tax accounting.
^You have not stated clearly, what your goals are.
My immediate goal is to gain admission to a master's of accounting program with a global focus.
^This is your goal. Why?
Thusly, I have chosen to apply to the MSA program at the **** School of Business because of its dedication to international affairs and culture.
^Add some more detail to suggest how the academic program relates to your interests.
Hello everyone, I just finished the rough draft of my admissions essay and need some feedback. This is the question I need to answer: What are your short-term and long-term goals, and how do they relate to your pursuit of graduate education at
^it defintely does read as a rough draft. There does not seem to be any real interest in wanting to attend this University. You do not specifically point out the benefits of the institution and the program, and how they relate to your goals.
You also, do not give sufficient detail as to what your goals are. Perhaps you can even say, why you have such goals?
Research the program and Uni, and relate the unique aspects of it to yourself and your goals.