'difficult and ethical problems in office' - Pittsburg-Katz mba essay

In 500 words or less, describe a situation where you worked on a project or assignment that you did not enjoy (perhaps due to the work assigned, the team members with whom you were assigned to work or any other related circumstance). Describe the general situation, your specific role, your actions and the outcome.

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In 2010 I was part of a 10 member team of which 3 people had less than one year of experience. On every diwali the client awards one team for best performance. That year our team won that award, where every team member was provided with a certificate and Rs 5000. Shockingly the three juniors in the team was devoid of the honors.

The juniors were an integral part of the team and had been the most honest and hardworkers in the short span of time they had worked. The success was a team effort and it is always important to boost the morale of youngsters during their early professional life. To my dismay none of the senior teammates took up this issue with the Project Manager and only sympathized with the juniors.

Business ethics was one of the courses that I was taught during my initial training in xxxx.I asked the team's Project Manager to let us know why such treatment was meted out to the juniors. The manager downplayed the issue stating that they were too young to have made any substantial contribution to the team. Failing to convince him, I decided to escalate the matter to our Delivery manager. I told him that such discrimination on the basis of age doesn't seem to be right. My courage inspired my senor teammates to back me this time. The delivery Manager did acknowledge that the discrimination was unethical. Eventually the juniors got what was rightfully theirs.

The turn of the events taught me a bit about handling difficult and ethical problems in office. My efforts helped me garner a lot of respect among my team members. My steps vindicated my belief that conviction on one's principles is important.

..... at this point you need to tell them what sort of a project that was... team of 10 does not reveal anything. What was the objective of this team?

Also, I feel your answer is not well aligned with the prompt. It is asking your experience of a situation where you worked on a project or assignment that you did not enjoy. This after the completion of the project not while you are in that....

Please read through another situation I had faced during that project.hope it is apt for the question:

Adversities and challenges brings out the best in a person. I believe that difficult situations have been part of my learning curve.
In 2010 when I was associated with Lloyds Bank account as Build Engineer for the Build and Configuration management team, we had faced an ethical dilemma. The team comprised of 8 members of which 4 were juniors(less than 3 years experienced) including me and the rest were seniors. There was a lack of proper management in the team as a result the work was never evenly distributed among the associates on the basis of their merit. The seniors who were supposed to take up the bulk of the tasks shelved most of the activities which were then taken up by us. The juniors were asked to come on weekends for Client support. However we never complained and took it as an opportunity to learn more and get into the thick of Build activities. We were sure to be rewarded with good appraisal for our diligence, on the contrary we were given nominal appraisal ratings much below our expectations. I am never afraid of calling a spade a spade. So my ethics prompted me to escalate our grievance to our manager. The manager did have cognizance of our efforts, Our problem was not only with the appraisal but also for a streamlined process where the work would be evenly distributed among the team members without any prejudice. The Project Manager had called for a meeting with all the teammates. He did listen to our concerns and decided to act accordingly. Consequently our appraisal ratings were upgraded and the team was asked to come out with a Build Configuration Process Model.

The turn of the events taught me a bit about handling difficult and ethical problems in office. My efforts helped me garner a lot of respect among my team members too. My steps vindicated my belief that conviction on one's principles is important and that true effort is always be rewarded.