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Exercise and living a healthy lifestyle is my greatest passion in life; PT 2013


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Aug 19, 2013   #1
Hello everyone,

Could I please get some feedback and revisions? This is a very rough rough draft of my essay. I would like to mention that the focus of my essay is strongly describing my decision making process in why and how I came to choose PT over other health care careers. I noticed that a lot of other people's essays focused a lot on their actual experience and what they saw at the clinics they worked in, but no description of their actual decision making process vs other careers. Thanks a lot in advance everyone!

- J
Describe your decision making process in choosing physical therapy as a career choice versus other health care careers.

Exercise and living a healthy lifestyle is my greatest passion in life. While many of my friends were inside playing video games, I was always outside engaging in physical activity. I felt such a sense of accomplishment from just running to the park or riding my bike around the block. As I got older, I started to play a lot of sports and found such clarity and freedom from it. I believe that being an exceptional physically active individual all my life has led me to firmly want to pursue something related exercise and fitness.

During my sophomore year of high school I had the opportunity to shadow a physical therapist at an outpatient clinic. My experience at this facility immensely ignited my interest in physical therapy. The energy and liveliness that I got from the atmosphere was so appealing to me. I loved every single thing from watching patients being stretched out to them running through a series of exercises. I also found the mixture of the patients that came in to be stimulating. There were all types of patients ranging from athletes to elderly people all of which had different injuries. One significant event that I experienced was observing manipulations and strategies performed by the PT. I was very amazed to see that how his bare hands could have such a healing effect. I was in awe because I was so naïve to think that injuries were treated by only prescriptions and drugs. After my experience at this clinic, I was strongly certain that PT was what I wanted to pursue.

I entered James Madison University knowing that PT was what I wanted to pursue, but also with an open mind to other possibilities. My interest of the human body was greatly augmented by JMU's unique anatomy department. Their department offered students to work with dried cadavers. It was so surreal to me that I was able to touch and see actual bones, muscles, tendons and organs. I was able to take it to the next level and take a wet cadaver dissection course. My knowledge of the human body went above and beyond of what I expected it to be for an undergraduate student. This whole experience inspired me even more to want to become a physical therapist. However, during the last year to a year and a half I felt a little compromised. I had the opportunity to be a teacher's assistant for anatomy lab for a couple of semesters. I found myself absolutely loving to teach other people about the human body. I also found an extreme satisfaction and rewarding feeling from it all. At this point, I was strongly convinced that I wanted to become a professor in anatomy. However, I spent more time thinking about it and found that PT was what I truly wanted. Although I loved to teach, I realized that I enjoyed helping people more physically. I also realized that physical therapists have the best of both worlds of being able to teach and help people physically.

After graduating from JMU, I felt that I knew of the PT profession on paper but not by experience. The little time I spent observing a PT during high school did not do it justice. My employment at Integrated Sports Medicine and Physical Therapy brought great light to see this profession for what it truly is. This type of medicine is quite different from all others because patients are not simply just given a pill, but with special techniques and strategies applied patients are healed. I adore the fact that the ways PTs are trained and educated to treat patients are extremely holistic and natural. This is something very unique to me that cannot be found elsewhere, and it has ultimately lead me to know that I truly want to be a part of that.

I believe that my passion for exercising and living a healthy lifestyle has transformed into something even greater from my journey. I was once focused on wanting to be physically healthy for myself, however I desire to want that for everyone. I am determined to provide all of services help others grow and improve. I firmly believe that physical therapy is what I am called to do. I hope to find and be given the opportunity to pursue it.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Aug 19, 2013   #2
Exercise and living a healthy lifestyle is my greatest passion in life.

.... Well, how about saying that keeping fit is your greatest passion and therefore you love doing physical exercises?

While many of my friends were inside playing video games, I was always outside engaging in physical activity.

.... I feel this a good point to get a start.
I feel you can do away with the first sentence completely. It is just a statement and the rest you talk through your experience and character. That part is much more convincing and very creative too. That's just a suggestion :)
jkjeremy - / 380 72  
Aug 20, 2013   #3
This essay has its moments, but it's pretty scattershot.

You need to outline your response.

I. Step one in the process of choosing this career. (This needs to be a feeling, idea, or REALIZATION.)
1. Cite an event involved in that step
a. Why that event was important?
2. If necessary, cite another event involved in this step.
b. Why was that event important?

II. Step TWO in the process of choosing this career. (This needs to be a feeling, idea, or REALIZATION.)
1. Cite an event involved in that step
a. Why that event was important?
2. If necessary, cite another event involved in this step.
b. Why was that event important?


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