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I am fascinated with the dynamics on financial market and aspire to one day capable of influencing the market. Financial market is always full of possibility that people on Wall Street constantly find the way to benefit from every circumstance. My goal in order to add more transparency into financial business can be achieved once I am a financial expert. My long term goal is to educated people from different income tax bracket to be able to invest cautiously in financial market.
My desired grow stronger every day after I finished the book, The Big Short, written by Michael Lewis. According to the book, it appears to me that you do not need a degree in finance or business in order to work at Wall Street bank. However, personally, I believe that it is important to either hold a degree in related field or learnt from an experienced investor in order to be successful in financial industry. Critically, I am certain that getting a degree yields better chance of success; which is why I choose to pursue my master degree in finance. While getting a degree, I look forward to further my knowledge and experience in financial industry through peer and faculty, as well as expanding my career network and searching for investing mentor. Moreover, I expected to become a CFA charter holder and earn an extra degree in Quantitative Finance within five years after graduate. Throughout those five years, I also anticipate to work in a tailor financial company in order to have a better understanding in specific field of investment, especially option and future.
I understand that there will be a lot pressures and competitions along the horizon. However, I am very confident that with my strong ambition, commitment, and knowledge I will be able to conquer those barriers and also excel in my career.
I am fascinated with the dynamics onof financial market and aspire to one day be capable of influencing the market.
I think you need to open your essay with more punch;
The dynamics of financial markets always fascinated me and nurtured my aspiration of becoming somebody who could influence them one day.Financial market is always full of possibility that people on Wall Street constantly find the way to benefit from every circumstance.
... I dont find much value addition to your response by this line.... Sounds repetition of the same idea.... also, it should be financial markets and not market, because finance is a very diverse subject that deals with many areas such as bonds, stocks, hedging etc.etc. So better be on the plural side :D
