HOW HAVE YOU IMPROVED? What have you done since last application that improves candidacy?

what have you done to improve yourself professionally?

Please tell us what you have done since the submissions of your last application that improves your candidacy to our program. (1500 characters)

Since the submission of my last application, I was accepted to graduate school where I received my Masters of Biomedical Sciences (MBS) and Masters of Public Health (MPH).

During the MBS program, I took the equivalent of first year medical school coursework. This program has strengthened my science background and improved my science gpa. I also feel that it has shown my ability to succeed in medical school coursework.

Through my public health education, I have been exposed to looking at health issues from a population perspective. Learning about concepts like social determinants of health and health care disparities has given me a broader perspective when it comes to patient care. I believe that this exposure will aid me when treating my future patients. I will be able to view their health issues through a socio-economic and environmental perspective due to my experience.

Overall, I feel that all of these experiences have strengthened my application and will aid me immensely in my future health care practice.

@kcharl02
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