Hi, Please review and help me to draft an impressive essay.If ISB were to admit one more student, I would be a very strong candidate because of the values and experience I would bring to the class of 2012.
Since my childhood, I have been fortunate enough to have experienced many successes. I was provided with the circumstances that made it possible for me to keep single-minded focus, and I excelled in whatever I set my eyes on. My interest in science made me work hard to pursue engineering at IIT. My passion, team spirit, and leadership abilities and sound physical training enabled me to lead the University Cricket team win many national level tournaments.
Early on in my career, I started connecting technology to end users. I focused on the big picture while innovating in technology. This helped me to work through the ranks in the IT industry and become the youngest member of the global core team of 30 Transition Managers in IBM (Strength 85,000 people) to support customers in the North America region.
I have extensive international work experience in India, Singapore, the United Kingdom, and the United States spanning across industries as Insurance, Healthcare, Banking, Auto, Industrial, and Media.
My passion for cricket and organizing capabilities led me to establish my Cricket Club in Michigan, and later play in Michigan cricket leagues. I realized there was a need for dedicated pitches, cricket fields, capturing and nurturing talent and creating awareness. I promoted cricket to Michigan State Officials for support and Corporate to arrange finances and professionalize the club, in the process adding to my dynamic network.
I am confident that my experience at various levels in IT industry coupled with my multicultural experience and knowledge of multiple industries will help me contribute to the class discussions and club activities in ISB.
I believe my achievements are results of my drive, commitment, passion and hard work rather than inheritance. If admitted I will surely make a difference to the student body of class of 2012.