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I wish I had observed the signs earlier but Growing up I had a very hardworking relative and she was so hard working that she was envied by most of her pairs her age. She helped me whenever I was down I would always run to her for help. Well at a certain stage in her late forties it became unbearable because she just received a promotion and her job demanded a lot of work, we expected her to run home after work to rest but after work she looks for under engagement like attending every meeting, meeting to deadlines early before it was due and always looking for what to do and whenever she had nothing to do she was out doing vigorous charity work there was always something to do. We thought it was just how she was; not knowing it was a progressive phase of mania to hypomania. We did everything we could to restrain her from going out but whenever she got the chance she literally spent her whole day out working. In her early fifties she went through a phase of depression were she literally put an end to every work activity she stopped going to work despite her valuable position in her office.
I always got irate about her depressive phase because a lot of things at home began to suffer. I always returned her moodiness with anger because I never understood that she was going through a phase. I observed that no matter how much we advised her or how much anger I returned she never changed this prompted me to read on conditions affecting the brain and I stumbled on some symptoms of a brain disorder relating to that which my relative had. I became so interested that I began downloading research journals and reading current problems in this disorder and breakthroughs in this disorder.
My interest in bipolar disorder is the fact that Mania has greater heritability rates than any other major psychiatric disorder
My theoretical, practical and analytical exposure to the challenges faced in effectively harnessing the full potential of microbes, devising ways to develop antibiotics in curing diseases caused by these microorganisms and the ground breaking discoveries in this field led me to take up internship and volunteer work at several organizations including Standards Organization of Nigeria, Nigerian Breweries Plc, Nigerian Navy Reference Hospital and Golden Cross Infirmary. Working in these Organizations gave me an insight into my value in the wellbeing of the society and the environment. I realized that at the heart of every industrial and health initiatives lay the work of a scientist.
Studying the information brochure and the University of Georgia home page I also assimilated encouraging comments and achievements from the University's alumni; I believe that a graduate study in your University has a ring of endless possibilities for me.
I believe that I would be a good addition to your program bringing with me positive leadership, dedication, integrity, hard work, discipline and improvement which I believe there is always a room for. I already posses an unwavering commitment to patient care, professionalism, lifelong learning, interpersonal and communication skills and demonstrating an investigatory and analytical thinking approach to patient management and research. I strongly believe that a graduate program at your university would improve my understanding of differential diagnosis, health promotion, all of which I hunger to comprehend. I hope by pursuing this ambition, I will be of service to the African continent where satisfactory neuroscience delivery system is still evolving.
Finally, neuroscience is an intellectually stimulating and constantly growing field of medicine, so what left unanswered in the classroom is to be answered in the laboratory through basic science and clinical research. I am hoping to participate in research that impacts the practice of neuroscience; and to provide high level neuroscience clinical services.
One of the few things I will take into neuroscience is that I can say I have seen various departments that make up the hospital or healthcare units where I worked for 2 years in close partnership with medical doctors as a microbiologists, chemists, hematologists and biochemists carrying out various laboratory test and I believe I have found my place in healthcare as an aspiring neuroscientists.
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