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Motivation Letter for General Linguistics at Radboud University



choerunnisa23 1 / -  
Feb 16, 2017   #1
Hi, everyone!
I am going to apply for general linguistics master programme at RU, So please kindly help me to review/correct/comment my motivation letter.
Thank you in advance :)

Motivation Letter - Linguistic Department



To Whom It Might Concern,

My name is [..], I graduated from Linguistics Department, Sundanese Literature Program from Faculty of Humanity, University of Padjadjaran on April 2016. I would like to continue my study in Linguistics at The Master's Programme of Radboud University, with a further specialization on General Linguistics.

By studying linguistics and participating in several linguistics researches have shaped my goal's career to become a researcher and lecturer. My friends and I did several researches and social experiments about Sociolinguistics: Bilingualism. We went to meet the society who is mastering more than one language. We took the sample and analyzed the differences. Me and my team went to four places, three years in a row while I was studying Sundanese Literature. There were Sukabumi, Kuningan, Brebes, and Pangandaran. Those places are located in the borderline, so the society were at least mastering two languages. The time when I analyzed all the data, I found the differences and the uniqueness of each languages. Frankly, I always find myself get excited and have been always wanting to share it to the people. In order to preserve local languages, annually, we presented all the data to share both knowledge and experiences living as 'the society'.

My personal motivation in learning about languages are my father and the nation; Indonesia. When I was in Elementary School, I was told by my father that languages are the very beginning in life. The codes that can make people understand about things in life, and he motivated me to learn another languages. He influenced me through the music and languages of another country, and that circumstance stimulated me to attend Faculty of Humanity and Linguistics Department. I pursued Sundanese major since I am sundanese and I have been wanting to share to the people how important to preserve local languages since Indonesia has many ethnics and languages.

As an active person, I joined several organizations and committees to make a good association with the other person from different background. Moreover, I was elected to be the chairwoman of the organizations for two periods. On top of that in 2015, I was elected to be the delegate of Indonesia in South Korea as a participant of fully-funded programme, Ajou International Summer School to embrace the diversity. I studied about humanity, especially in language and culture. I presented Indonesian local language and culture, also learned about Korean language and culture. Overall, I am pleased with my experiences as a student, since I was graduated as a government scholarship recipient with cum laude predicate yet I still can manage the organizations well, even study abroad.

In conclusion, I would like to say that I am motivated to gain new experiences, advance my skills and broaden my understanding of the dynamic linguistics, and I am persuaded that studying Linguistics in Master Program would contribute to my development as a researcher and lecturer. Therefore, I want to continue my study in Radboud University since it is a reputable research-based university as it is ranked 118th in the world. Moreover Radboud is notable as a university with quality of teaching, research, and service provision. Radboud has all the facilities that students need. I am personally amazed by the University Library and Nijmegen Centre for Academic Writing facilities. Thereupon I look forward to your positive response. I believe my qualification and your needs would be an excellent fit. Thank you very much for your time and for considering my application.

Best regards,
[..]
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 16060  
Feb 16, 2017   #2
Choerunnisa, please move the paragraph pertaining to the actual motivation that you have for General Linguistics to the top of the essay. This would be the current 3rd paragraph. Make it your first paragraph so that the reviewer will immediately get an idea behind your true motivation. If you review your essay with a more critical eye, you will notice that the content is good, but it lacks coherence. So the presentation is a bit confusing and illogical.

If you reformat the essay by using the following chronological paragraphs, the essay will be easier to revise and understand. Use the following (paragraph) presentation instead: 3, 2, 4, 5. Paragraph one can be totally removed because that is information already known to the reviewer. You should only present immediate and relevant information in your motivation letter.

By the way, the 5th paragraph needs to be revised as well. Just go direct to the point and explain why you have chosen Radboud University for your masters learning program. You don't need to summarize the previous information because you only need to justify your desire to attend the university. Your other skills and related experiences can be best presented in the statement of purpose where you can further expand on the discussion in a proper manner.

Once you have completed your reorganized paragraphs, we can review the essay again and this time, concentrate, further improving the information or presentation of your essay.


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