Can you give me an example of what i would replace the crossed our portion?
It has to be one of those excellent sentences that makes you feel a certain energy when you write it...
Some sentences are just great... you can feel the intrigue they create...
I'll look at this new version.
A man named
You could be more specific and say, "A scientist named..."
Yet if we have radical thinkers then our growth is infinite. I want to be one of those radical thinkers.
I like this, and at the beginning of the next paragraph it would be perfect to get very specific. This concept is general and dramatic. The next concept should be a specific statement about your specific interests and intentions.
My passion for Chemistry originally came from the aspirations my mother once had, but never accomplished. Twenty years ago, my mother was studying molecular science in Odessa, Ukraine.
Actually, this works. Very good.
Try to find space in the essay to be very specific about the books and articles you have been reading. I hope you will mention at least one book or article published in the past 4 years.
This is very good!