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(rural management from IRMA) - why teach for india


ashokvishnoi 1 / 2  
Jul 24, 2012   #1
Be the change you want to see in the world,lines by gandhi inspires me and education is one area which will lead the change in the coming century.But does majority indian people have access to quality education?the answer is no.i want to change this and believe in the principle of tree.A tree starts with a seed and thens grows and bears fruits and seeds while lead to a forest.

Initially,i want to learn about the challenges faced by the education sector in educating masses practically working with teach for india which will help in learning the basics and also mastering them over a period of two years.it will be stepping stone towards my journey for leading india to a educational reform whats better than joing teach for india which has made a remarkable mark within few years of its journey.here there will people from whom i can learn and improve ,take advices and put forward my opinions in a better way than the practical knowledege which is imaprted in the B schools.

i want to do an MBA in rural management from IRMA anand and start an educational movement in rural india where quality education is stilla dream for many.historically,many of the greatest scientiest and influncers have been from rural parts of india ,india is a great coutry with a powerfull resource still being unprocessed.if this is skillfully developed into a boon and not a bane on the resources it will one day lead india to much more productive and developed country while still holding its cultural diversity.
YangTeng 4 / 6  
Jul 24, 2012   #2
Sorry, but what were you trying to imply? I am not very good in English but your second paragraph do need serious rephasing. I do not understand what you trying to say. Is it possible for you to list out the main points for your essay so i could try to rephase it for you.
ken99m 5 / 9  
Jul 24, 2012   #3
have the access to quality education?
believe in the principle of the tree.
.A tree starts with a seed and then grows and bears the fruits.
for leading india to an educational reform
education is stilla dream for many students.

Dear, i would suggest you to make your sentences short. You must revise the rule of punctuation and I found jump of ideas in your Essay.
ana_p 27 / 81  
Jul 24, 2012   #4
Hi,

1. Beginning of each sentence should be in a capital letter.
2. Please give blank space after each comma, question mark and completion of sentences.

Try to avoid these small mistakes. And, try to explain your ideas in detail such as, what is teach for India? Is this any movement of academy..? What do they work..? so that reader can understand. (..just a suggestion)


Be the change you want to see in the world, lines by gandhi inspires me and education is one area which will lead the change in the coming century.But does majority indian people have access to quality education? the answer is no.i (I always capital) want to change this and believe in the principle of tree. A tree starts with a seed and thens grows and bears fruits and seeds while lead to a forest.

Initially,i want to learn about the challenges faced by the education sector in educating masses practically working with teach for india which will help in learning the basics and also mastering them over a period of two years. it will be stepping stone towards my journey for leading india (India should be in capital) to a educational reform whats better than joing teach for india which has made a remarkable mark within few years of its journey. here there will people from whom i can learn and improve, take advices and put forward my opinions in a better way than the practical knowledege which is imaprted in the B schools.

i want to do an MBA in rural management from IRMA anand and start an educational movement in rural india where quality education is stilla dream for many.historically, many of the greatest scientiest and influncers have been from rural parts of india ,india is a great coutry with a powerfull resource still being unprocessed.if this is skillfully developed into a boon and not a bane on the resources it will one day lead india to much more productive and developed country while still holding its cultural diversity.

Good Luck!!

Thanks,
Ana.
OP ashokvishnoi 1 / 2  
Jul 26, 2012   #5
thanks for the review --- is this fine ?

"Be the change you want to see in the world" lines by gandhi inspires me and education is one area which will lead the change in the coming century.But does majority indian people have the access to quality education? The answer is no,i want to change this and believe in the principle of the tree.A tree starts with a seed , grows and bears the fruits and seeds which will lead to a forest.

Initially,i want to learn about the challenges faced by the education sector in educating masses practically working with Teach for India which will help in learning the basics and also mastering them over a period of two years.Further,it will be stepping stone towards my journey for leading India to an educational reform whats better than joing TFI which has made a remarkable mark within few years of its journey.here there will people from whom i can learn and improve ,take advices and put forward my opinions in a better way than the practical knowledege which is imaprted in the B schools.

Afterwards,i want to do an MBA in rural management from IRMA(anand) and start an educational movement in rural India where quality education is still a dream for many students.Historically,many of the greatest scientiest and influencers have been from rural parts of India ,India is a great coutry with a powerfull resource still being unprocessed.If this is skillfully developed into a boon and not a bane on the resources.It will one day lead India to much more productive and developed country while still holding its cultural diversity and biodiversity.
ken99m 5 / 9  
Jul 26, 2012   #6
Initially,i want to learn about the challenges faced by the education sector in educating masses. Practically working with Teach for India that (that word seems more suitable to me ) will help in learning the basics and also mastering them over a period of two years.Further,it will be a stepping stone towards my journey for leading India to an educational reform. Whats better than joing TFI which has made a remarkable mark within few years of its journey.H ere there will bemany people (instead of people, if you use the word 'Mentor', suits more ) from whom i can learn and improve ,take advices and put forward my opinions in a better way than the practical knowledege that will be imaprted in the B schools.

Afterwards,i want to do an MBA in rural management from IRMA(anand) and start an educational movement in rural India, where quality education is still a dream for many students.Historically,many of the greatest scientiest and influencers have been from rural parts of India ,font#FF0000]. India is a great coutry with a powerfull resource still being unprocessed.If this is skillfully developed into a boon and not a bane on the resources, than It will one day lead India to much be more productive and developed country while still holding its cultural diversity and biodiversity.


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