"to share knowledge and help others" - Additional information MBA Admission

When you are a young person, the loss of a father is extremely difficult because you are losing a mentor.When I was 9,my father's death traumatized the entire family.My mother,a determined woman put a strong emphasis on education,hard work,and ethics. Because of the foundation of values she had instilled in me,I learned to overcome obstacles with equanimity.Moreover with these values,I approach every aspects of my life with same passion and dedication.I grew up in a challenging environment and challenges always bring out the best in me.As a professional now, I still feel a deep sense of respect for hard work whenever I see it,regardless of its nature.Moreover, this understanding puts me in a better position to cooperate with all levels of personnel in a company,or more generally with people from all different backgrounds.

My life has made me realise the importance of education.I am a firm believer of child education among unprivileged ones as it opens lots of avenues to better their lives.It is the best gift we can offer to a child who is engulfed in a vicious trap of poverty and neglect.This has led me to get involved in child education related activities in "NSS" and "JDA care".I derive a sense of satisfaction by sponsoring children's education through organisations such as "World Vision India".My business achievements will ultimately find their way in social cause.My ultimate vision is to set up a trust in my father's name which will sponsor the education to the deprived and underprivileged children.

I am not a sum of random set of pieces but always integrate my diverse interests so that my traits and activities complement each other.Sharing knowledge with others is one of my strongest trait that add strength to my character.Be it using my experiences in banking to help my friends and colleagues to select the best possible deal from a bank or using the knowledge in income tax laws to help people plan tax savings and file returns,I have always been ready to share knowledge and help others. This trait has enabled me to not only build relationships and create an environment for free flow of information but also gain knowledge from others.

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I think your essay has not coherency and you have mentioned many belifes one afetr another one.


because of losing a mentor


... i learned not only to overcome obstacles with equanimity but also to approach every aspects of my life with same passion and dedication.


the deep sense of respect to hardworking, puts me as a professional in a better aposition to cooperate with all people from different background and organizational levels.


is avenues a correct word for this sentence?

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