Motivation letter for Master of Arts
I need an assistance in editing this motivation letter and i would also like if you give me some ideas.
All ideas and critisms are accepted ...please this urgent.
With this letter, I would like to express my strong interest in applying for the Master of Arts in the International Marketing Management at The Berlin School of Economics and Law starting in October 2015.
Graduated from University as an engineer of radiophysics and electronics in 1999 I understood that for me the more interested is the field of business. Since 2000 I have worked in different companies and got skills of finding clients and trading as manager until 2006 when I decided to try to start my own company.
I suggest that you rephrase your paragraph to;
I graduated with a degree in Engineering major in Radiophysics and Electronics in 1999 but my interest is in Business administration.
I have worked in different companies and acquired skills in dealing with clients and trading as a manager since 2000 to 2006 till i decided to start my own company.
I have a strong interest in studying International business and management, the fact that its in English that will enhance my Language skills it will also allow me to interact with students from all over the world. This is the perfect chance to get acquainted with other people, their culture and their tradition. What makes this more exciting is being in Berlin, a bustling city in Germany with the most modern technology alongside beautiful cities in Europe with highest standard of living.
You still have to work on your essay, re-write it following the input from my side and pst it again here, just make sure that you mind your grammar, there should also be a logic to your essay, the following questions should guide you in making your letter a good one;
- what is your purpose in taking an International degree
- what are your capabilities that will be helpful in achieving your goal
- what do you need to achieve this goal
- what will you contribute to the institution to make your stay worthwhile
- what do you think is the best lesson you can learn aside from the ones you need for your job
Hope to see your next letter.
Thank you so much, justivy03!
I have rewrited my letter. I would appreciate if you correct my letter.
I graduated with a degree in Engineering major in Radiophysics and Electronics in 1999 but my interest always has been in business. I have worked in different companies as a manager since 2000 and acquired skills in dealing with clients and trading, untill in 2006 I decided to start my own company.
Starting my own business in Russia 9 years ago I had a little knowledge of managing and marketing. Right after beginning the business I have started to get more experience and learned by my own mistakes. Since that time until now I do not stop learning new ways of improving of doing of my company. Despite lack of knowledge of managing I could create and continue to develop the business. Now I feel the need of the skills to effectively take on demanding management and executive tasks in company. In addition nowadays in Russia we can see the growing of internet activity and constantly changing in the market. After thinking of way by which I can improve my skills and seeking the list of different economic schools I have chose your university as the best school that can streamline and systematize my knowledges.
Nine years of managing the company not only gave me foundation about business but also brought to me the chance to improve needed skills for later. Being a director of the company as well as creating marketing strategy and tracking behavior of costumers helped me acquire skills in leadership, teamwork and marketing. During my work I have also enhanced my communication skill through various dealings. I believe these are necessary skills when studying at the Berlin School of Economics and Law and working in the field of Marketing.
I have a strong interest in studying international marketing management, the fact that it is in English that will enhance my Language skills it will also allow me to interact with students from all over the world. This is the perfect chance to get acquainted with other people, their culture and their tradition. What makes this more exciting of being in Berlin, a bustling city in Germany with the most modern technology alongside beautiful cities in Europe with highest standard of living.
Now I think that I need to get more higher education to be an asset not only for our country but also for the world and I think Germany is the best place for me to achieve my goal. I am serious about my education and want to explore something new that is really good for me.
Berlin school of Economics and Law is one of the best business school in Germany, and it has also an international teaching staff with very renewed teachers. I think that the Master of Arts in the International Marketing Management at the Berlin school of Economics and Law will give me the opportunity to be a full international person, and possible for my future to have an international career. I do believe that with the specialized academic environment, developed over the years by dedicated researchers, teachers and even students at Berlin school of Economics and Law, will put me on the fast tract to a career in international business. The wide range of knowledge acquired during the course at your institute will enable and equip me with the skills and competence required in rapidly changing corporate world. I could proceed an excellent career with my knowledge and the scope to get the Master Degree. After obtaining it I will be able to adapt myself with proper enthusiasm. I believe obtaining a Master Degree will provide me the necessary background for the welfare of people and country.
It is my pleasure that I am writing an application to achieve my Master degree from your institute . I am confident enough that I could be able to accomplish higher study in the proposed field that will contribute to my future life as well as to the society.
I am looking forward to be a part of this prestigious program.
A higher education would mean a great addition to my credentials and acquiring it in Germany is the cherry on top.This will be a whole lot of experience that I will be a lifelong treasure for me.
Berlin school of Economics and Law is one of the best business school in Germany(, - delete) (and it has also an international teaching staff with very renewed teachers.- rephrase to) with renowned staff. I think that the Master of Arts in the International Marketing Management at the Berlin school of Economics and Law will give me the opportunity (to be a full international person, and possible for my future- delete) to have an international career.
I am looking forward to be a part of this prestigious program.
Alfk, thanks for re-writing your letter, one thing that I notice though, you keep going back to your point of pleading for your spot in the school, I understand that you're eager to be part of the program but you already made your point in the beginning of your letter so you can move on to giving them the benefit of the doubt that being one of their students would earn as much knowledge and experience as you do for the institute.
I have a few input for the last 3 paragraphs. Good Luck!!!