SOP for Aeromechanics. Need your help to edit and shorten it to 250 words. help out guys

As a child, I always dreamt of becoming an engineer and it was the field of mechanical which caught my interest when I had been to a vintage car museum in my childhood days and this interest grew further by watching various educational programs on television. My growing passion made to take up an undergraduate course in Mechanical and at the end of 4 years of my UG course, I stood in top 20 % of the students in mechanical department with an aggregate of 67.3%.

During my course, I was a part of various co-curricular activities which helped me for my overall development. Frequent interactions with the professors made my basics strong in the subjects like Thermodynamics, Turbo machines and Machine design. During my pre-final year, I thought of carrying out a project on "Vertical axis windmills" which required an aerofoil design. Although the project could not complete due to academic pressure, the subject created special interest in me, which pushed me towards XXXX . My academic project on "development of dynamic simulator test rig for testing composite leaf spring" enhanced my knowledge in fracture mechanics and bolstered my design skills. My work experience on Vibration testing machine in R&D environment strengthened my knowledge in Experimental vibrations.

My willingness to explore research opportunities in the field of turbo machines encouraged me to pursue a master's program. XXXX is one such challenging program which I found perfectly structured and matches finely with my interest. My technical knowledge along with my work experience in research field would enable me to excel in this program.

I think my edits have eliminated some words, hopefully they are enough! Good luck!

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During my course, I was a part of various co-curricular activities which helped me for my overall development. Frequent interactions with the professors madestrengthened my basics strong in the subjects like Thermodynamics, Turbo machines and Machine dDesign. [During my pre-final year, I thought of carrying out a project on "Vertical axis windmills" which required an aerofoil design. Although the project could not completed due to academic pressure, the subject created special interest in me, which pushed me towards XXXX . My academic project on "development of dynamic simulator test rig for testing composite leaf spring" enhanced my knowledge inof fracture mechanics and bolstered my design skills. My work experience on Vibration testing machine in R&D environment strengthened my knowledge in Experimental vibrations. I have also conceived of a project on "Vertical axis windmills," but have not yet had the chance to complete it. This idea has sparked a particular interest in me, which is part of my motivation to XXXX.

My willingnessambition to explore research opportunities in the field of turbo machines also encouraged me to pursue a master's program. XXXX is one suchachallenging program which I foundseemsperfectly structured and matches finely with my interests. My technical knowledge along withandmy work experience in the research field would enable me to excel in this program.

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Thanks a lot mate.... Is it appropriate to Include my pre-final year project (I have also conceived of a project on "Vertical axis windmills," but have not yet had the chance to complete it. This idea has sparked a particular interest in me, which is part of my motivation to XXXX. ) at the last of paragraph? Or shall i mention it before my academic project.