SOP for applying in Germany - Starting phrases

I have always been attracted by the day to day mechanized working of the world and since my school days, Science has always been a stimulant of my attention. I have also been dexterous with my toys and engineered them as I have found most of them in pieces or half opened and my thirst for engineering never quenched. My skills in Sciences particularly mathematics has continued to nourish and blossom throughout my school and university and I enjoy applying my scientific and mathematical concepts in routine life problems.

I have been interested in mathematics throughout my primary and high schools and I have continued to develop this talent of mine with consistent hard work. My entry into the Science stream has always been motivated by achieving good grades in this subject in the early phase of my life.

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Just edited a couple of things:

I have always been attracted by the day to day mechanized working of the world and since my school days, Science has always been a stimulant of my attentionEver since my school days, science and mechanized working has attracted me(Just to shorten a little) .

I have also been dexterous with my toys and engineered them as I have found most of them in pieces or half opened and my thirst for engineering never quenched. (I'd suggest that you change it a little as to how you put the pieces of the broken toys together. A little editing in the sentence would do.) My skills in Sciences particularly mathematicsScience and Mathematics has continued to nourish and blossom throughout my schooling and at university as well . and I enjoy applying my scientific and mathematical concepts in routine life problems.in real life situations and problems.

I have been interested in mM athematics throughout my primary and high schools and I have continued to develop this talent of mine with consistent hard work. My entry into the Science stream has always been motivated by achieving good grades in this subject in the early phase of my life. (Change this a little)

I like the approach to your essay! Good Luck on your Application!!! :)

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