URGENT........Please, review my SOP and tell me what else i need to add or edit.
Since my childhood, I was fascinated by machines. I used to play with Remote control cars, LEGO and other mechanical toys. I was always curious to know how things work and used to repair broken toys. Of course, I took things apart to see how they worked and did my experiments with electric things like D.C. motors, bulb, and solenoid. Simply all my hobbies were somehow connected with mechanics. I found I had an aptitude for understanding "complicated" electrical and mechanical things. When I realized there was a field where I could learn more by working with people and produce efficient and effective solutions for the problems of the community that are easily implemented and generates benefits for everyone, engineering, it was a natural choice.
During my bachelor's degree subjects like CAD/CAM & Operational research, I like the most. CAD was very helpful to understand finite element analysis and 2D-3D transformation. By using the basics of CAD, I learned about drafting and to draw any part in SoftWares like CATIA and SolidWorks. Operational research was a new subject for me. It is an area of operations where psychology and math are both equally imperative. I learned about minimizing the cost of transportation of goods, project management, process control, optimization and concepts like MODI method, assignment problem, queuing theory, Program Evaluation, and Review Technique (PERT) and CPM (Critical path method). With the help of advanced mathematical tools and statistical models, we can obtain highly efficient results. Moreover, I used concepts like the Critical Path Method of operational research subject to complete my sophomore year project in 10 months.
In my 3rd year of college, I got an opportunity to present a paper titled 'Application of Selective Catalysis Reduction Systems for Exhaust Emission Control of Compression Ignition Engines' at ICAME (International Conference on Advances in Mechanical Engineering) 2019. I discussed emission norms, working on the Selective Catalyst Reduction system, Challenges, and possible solutions. Apart from this, I have published a research paper about 'Compact button-based Hydraulic Jack' in IJRASET (International Journal of Applied Science and Engineering). In this project, I have used my software skills to design models in SolidWorks and with the help of team members fabricated model by using the wiper motor, pump, gears, etc. Normal hydraulic jack is not suitable for women and old age people because it requires more work but this prototype people can lift cars or heavy objects quickly and with less required energy.
In my final year of graduation, I got an opportunity to work with our H.O.D. and he helped me to guide on the major project titled- 'Development of Selective Catalysis Reduction (SCR) based Emission Control System for Exhaust Emission Reduction of Compression Ignition Engines'. In this project, I did temperature, velocity, pressure and other analysis of the D.P.F. (Diesel Particular Filter) model in ANSYS which was designed in CATIA software in 3 different parts and finally assembled. This project was very helpful to get depth knowledge of Bharat stage 4(BSIV), Bharat stage 6(BSVI) norms and chemical reactions inside DPF. I have improvised my team management and time management skills in this project.
Talking about my internships, I did two internships after the completion of my third year in college. Firstly, I did an internship at National Thermal Power Corporation (NTPC) gas and steam-based power plant. I learned about operation and maintenance Power plant and how to operate the plant safely and efficiently. My passion for Industrial Engineering grew even stronger when I did my in-plant Training at Schneider Electric, Vadodara for four weeks. I studied about the testing of medium voltage switchgear in the R&D lab. I was able to understand Product Layout and assembly lines they are using to achieve a smooth and rapid flow of products. From the quality control department, I got knowledge about the procedure to check the quality of switchgear, ring main unit and various materials used to manufacture it. They also provided information on how they manage their Inventory and how they try to reduce their inventory costs. I also saw the application of lean manufacturing like six sigma and waste control management techniques. These valuable lectures by Industry experts helped me to understand the real-time situation and also the problems they face while managing the workforce. Therefore, I believe that a Graduate Program is an essential step for me to acquire a higher level of knowledge, leadership skills and problem-solving ability to tackle the most diverse and intricate problems in an Industry.
My six months job as a Junior Design Engineer in Aerosphere Company helped me to improve my skills in designing and analysis of parts like the aero-plane wing, floor beam. I got practical experience in quality checks and quality assurance of various parts. I got skills like project management, quality control. I got an opportunity to be a part of a multifaceted team of domain specialists, software developers and project managers and familiarized myself with various modeling challenges, optimization, and diagnostic techniques.
I did Lean Champion Course for 1 week organized by the 'Indian Centre for Research and Manufacturing Excellence' (ICME) in my college. In this course, I learned about lean manufacturing, waste management, and six sigma technique. During this training, I took part in various activities which helped me to improve skills like leadership, time management, decision making, and communication. Also, by doing my MS in the USA I can improve these skill set by getting in contact with smart peoples from the relevant areas. Also, I will practical knowledge with theoretical concepts which is very much limited in countries like India. I have shortlisted your university according to my profile and I will know more about industrial engineering from your university. I will get in touch with reliable resources by working with your university professors.
By MS in Industrial Engineering course, I will get essential skills in mathematics, logistics, and management. I'll able to develop quantitative reasoning skills that help me to evaluate the overall quality and reliability of manufactured goods. This master's program can help me to make connections within the field and ultimately land a job. By working with creative people, I am able to solve the problems of the community more effectively and efficiently by using these skills.
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4783 Discuss the SOP in reverse, keeping only the relevant information for the presentation. Omit the useless information such as your interests in childhood and other similar topics. As an MS student, you are expected to have mature influences on your decision to attend graduate school. This should stem from your line of work and the foundation / introduction you received in college. To revise this essay use the following:
- My six months job as a Junior Design Engineer ... (Add information about your regular job. An internship is acceptable but does not carry the same weight as an indication of proper, professional employment related to the MS course.)
- I did Lean Champion Course for 1 .. making, and communication.
- In my 3rd year of college... less required energy.
- In my final year of graduation...skills in this project.
- Talking about my internships... in an Industry.
What should your additional information focus on?
- A clearer purpose for your studies (academic and professional)
- Course curriculum related reasons for choosing this university
- Technical reasons for choosing the university (training programs, networking opportunities, etc) and why it will be helpful in achieving your purpose of studies.
Your reference to the university needs to be based on actual job application settings rather than what you hope to learn, without spelling out why you need to learn those information. This should tie in with the purpose and motivation for your desire to complete this course.
As the major you're applying isn't in line with your undergraduate major (ME -> Industrial Eng), you need to emphasis how you were able to come with this decision. Mention only relevant experiences, interests and career aspirations that guides you to this field (IE) and MS program. If you're applying to specific university, elaborate why you choose the institution. Other universities also offer Industrial Engineering courses, with networking and also working opportunity upon graduation. Why do you need to apply to this university specifically?
Also there are many mistakes in your writing, be careful and always proofread your writing to ensure readability.
intricate problems in an Industry in the industry
Also, I will practical knowledge with theoretical
By MS in Industrial Engineering course,
When using acronym, introduce the full term first.
This is right: Program Evaluation, and Review Technique (PERT)
This is not: CPM (Critical path method)
Good luck with your application.
