Hi, Please help review my SOP.
A clear and relevant essay in English (1,000 - 1,500 words) addressing the following:
·Your motivation for choosing this MSc programme.
I desire to be an expert in the design of efficient energy systems and sustainable processes. My interest in energy stems from the need for cleaner and more efficient production processes in my country. The abundance of oil and gas resources has resulted in a lot of oil and gas production activities, and many of these oil production platforms are involved in the constant flaring of associated gases, notwithstanding the fines and strict laws against this. I have chosen to pursue a master's degree in Chemical Engineering at TU Delft to build my expertise in energy-efficient processes. My goal is to design production processes that utilize associated gases from exploration activities to generate power for large communities and other high-powered plants used in industries.
Growing up in a conservative society, my parents advised me to study medical sciences due to the perceived lack of female visibility in Engineering. My penchant for math and chemistry and the ever-growing reliance on the Energy industry influenced my decision to study chemical engineering for my undergraduate degree. I obtained my BEng in Chemical Engineering with honours in July 2019 from XYZ University, Nigeria. As a requirement, I enrolled in classes such as Engineering Mathematics, thermodynamics, Transport Phenomena, Unit Operations, Chemical Reaction Engineering, Process Optimization and Chemical Engineering Plant Design. The lecture delivery and class activities were insightful, and this helped me develop an interest in sustainable processes and process control. In the practical aspect of these courses, I led a team of 10 to design a plant for the production of Liquefied Petroleum Gas at 3900scf/day. As a team, we were able to fulfil the requirements of the project and achieve a set deliverable which was a final product that had a calculated 99 percent purity level. The completion of this project gave me the requisite knowledge in designing chemical processes.
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The second paragraph is irrelevant to the discussion. You should remove that paragraph and replace it instead, with a paragraph that discusses why you chose to study at TU Delft instead. You have to clearly explain the connection between your academic motivation and professional development with the choice of university and masters course. Use the paragraph to explain how the course curriculum of the university will build your already existing skills. By explaining your existing theoretical and technical skills in the essay, you will be able to justify your interest in the program and highlight what you hope to learn and improve with regards to your theoretical and practical skills.
There should also be a paragraph that better explains your goal based on the design production processes. What do you hope to accomplish through the completion of these studies? What is the idea behind your interests? What professional change do you wish to bring to this sector in your country? Why do you feel that is important to accomplish? These are but a few of the questions that should explain the purpose of your studies to the reviewer.
Now, make sure to explain to the reviewer what sort of masters thesis you may want to complete as a student. Make sure that it aligns itself with your purpose as you described earlier. Find a way to make this part sound exciting and innovative. Be sure to include a reference to the university offerings and how you see the university helping you to complete or accomplish your thesis goal.