"Learning is like rowing upstream: not to advance is to drop back."
The above words have always been a key point behind my learning. They have helped me frame my targets and reach the goals of my career so far. I have been blessed to have parents who instilled me with good values and principles. They have supported me in accomplishing the goals I have set forth. While working in various areas at different organizations and having a master level of education, I still felt the need for a specialized domain to reap my career advancement goals.
Science has always been a fascination and more of a miracle to me from my childhood. At the school level I used to question myself as to how could these DNA, proteins and enzyme perform their heavy load of work by being small and tiny molecules. Then I decided that after my school I should pursue my education in Biological sciences. The burning fire in me to study biological sciences led me to take a Bachelors degree in Biochemistry & Biotechnology and Masters degree in Biomedical Technology. After graduating I decided to enter the biotechnology-pharmaceutical industry to gain hands-on work experience. I worked predominantly in manufacturing/quality control area within different biotechnology companies. While working with these companies, I developed a wide array of skill-set ranging from understanding current good manufacturing practices (cGMPs) to developing production procedures to optimize manufacturing and/or regulatory requirements and quality assessment of products as per International standards. I also had exposure to various national and international audits.
As a graduate school candidate, I intend to focus on the regulatory aspects within the biotechnology industry. Regulatory affairs is the birth of the modern pharmaceutical regulations, which assures safe and effective drug delivery all over the world. It is a crucial department in the approval and compliance process and, ultimately, in a product's success. My focus will be delivery of safe and effective healthcare products to people all over the world. With a regulatory affairs degree, I will play a pivotal role in ensuring compliance with applicable laws and regulations in the development and commercialization of the healthcare products. Combining my knowledge of cGMPs and understanding of scientific principles, I will be able to compile product related information, advise scientists and manufacturers on regulatory requirements, and submit license applications to regulatory authorities.
I feel that Masters of Science in Bioscience Regulatory Affairs at your University will be the most logical extension of my academic pursuits and a major step towards achieving my objectives. This program's curriculum is designed to bridge the gap between basic life sciences and the regulatory demands of the industry. I am a stern believer of positive attitude, quality, and hard work. I promise to attain meteoric heights and bring glory to your institution, if I am given a chance.
The above words have always been a key point behind my learning. They have helped...
If you want to start with that quote, you have to structure the essay around it... like, the first paragraph can explain miracles of science as the motivators that keep you advancing upstream... and in the second paragraph, you explain their school's specific resources and faculty membrs as the footholds that enable you to persevere.
You have to stick to that analogy, and make it work. That is what makes people feel that it is a brilliant essay, and it actualy is pretty easy.
The connection of the quote to your process should begin in the first paragraph. After explaining that the quote is important to you, end that first para with a sentence that succinctly tells the reader the main points emphasized in the essay. Imagine how cool this essay would be if it served a duel purpose: it enables you to explain yourself, and it does so in a way that makes your situation serve as one, grand exposition of the truth behind that quote.
I have already emphasized the importance of the quote at the end of the second paragraph that " However pursuing an advanced graduate degree has always been a personal aspiration, which will further enhance my knowledge base".
So now please can you explain in detailed manner where exactly you are hinting at? Also should I include the advantages of studying in that particular school.
Thanks for your feedback. I think now I got your point. I have modified the SOP to the best level I could understand to.Please review it and let me know if there are still any areas for improvement.
I like it! The thing I said about sticking with the quote is that it would be good to refer to the quote a few times in the essay -- but it is not necessary! If you wanted, you could do this:
...still felt the need for a specialized domain to reap my career advancement goals. Like the swimmer working his way upstream, I had to press on or lose progress.
I am a stern believer of positive attitude, quality, and hard work. I promise to swim upstream diligently while learning at you r institution, if I am given a chance.
"I promise to attain meteoric heights and bring glory to your institution, if I am given a chance."
I would rephrase it starting with, "If I am given a chance...," in order to give more impact.
Thanks a lot Kevin and Silverystarsfor all your valuable feedbacks:))