Hello, I'm applying for a Masters in Digital Media/Interactive Arts. Here's my Statement of Purpose.
my interest in the field of design
It was the 11th of November, 2012 when I discovered that I'd really gotten myself into some serious trouble. I was in a college, in a city where I didn't think I belonged because there was no creativity in what I was doing.
I'd given it some serious thought in the past few weeks, but now it was time. I packed my bags and headed back home..where I would have to explain exactly why a 9-5 job at a cubicle wasn't something I saw myself doing for the rest of my life. What I rather saw myself doing, was working as a creative individual, as someone who strived to make the world a little better than it was before.
Enter July 2013 and I'm now an arts student, studying at Srishti Institute of Art, Design & Technology in Bangalore, India. I'd entered as a Visual Communication student, but eventually found my work flowing to the fields of Product Design, Industrial Arts & Interactive Media. As I gained exposure to different fields of design, I started applying knowledge from one area to another: Used form and structure in visual language, and visual aesthetic in the products I'd make.
In my 2nd year of art school I had a course on Furniture Fixtures & Joineries, and we were expected to create a simple table/chair using the joineries that we'd learnt about. But I pushed myself a little further, and made an interactive wireless speaker (slightly larger than your average guitar) which could change it's colours based on the music that was playing. What really stood out to me was the aspect of communication between , the idea that if you give life to something, it can talk back to you. This project got me into the Autodesk Bootcamp, where I'd gone into the semi-final phase.
Eventually, that led me to get an internship at The Workshop, a cross-disciplinary design studio in Bangalore, India. There I had access to ideas, machines & idea machines. It was a great experience and also opened up the possibilities of AR. I started to delve into interactive spheres of communication and researching about the same.
My objectives for graduate studies are focused on advancing interfaces and interactions in an virtual sphere. To lay down a framework of research which moves me in a direction of understanding the limitations and capacities of these new technologies and to see how far they can be pushed. My experience with Augmented Reality so far has been minimal, but I'm sure this will influence my future pursuits and will provide the necessary foundation to create new technology that augments people's abilities.Holt Educational Consultant - / 14,835 
4783 Mohit, do not try to pass off a personal statement as a statement of purpose. One cannot replace the other due to the differing focus of each essay. In this instance, you can only use the objectives paragraph at the end of the essay for the statement of purpose. You could actually open the revised essay with that specific objective. Are you going for a non-thesis course? From the way you wrote this essay, it seems that you are still pursuing an undergraduate degree. When are you graduating? You may want to reconsider applying for masters acceptance until you have had at least 2 years work experience in order to be sure that this is actually the field of work that you wish to pursue as a full time career. Additionally, as a masters degree applicant, the lack of work experience and pure theoretical and amateur practical experience on your part could be a hindrance in your application since you will be up against more seasoned applicants who have a minimum of 2 years work related experience.
There is actually no way to strengthen this essay at the moment because, as an undergraduate, you lack proper professional references such as relevant internships at multiple companies and training programs in relation to your employment as a professional in this field that could be considered in lieu of the lacking years of experience. These are the reasons why I said you are trying to pass off a personal statement as a statement of purpose. The whole essay only speaks of the foundation of your interest and your relevant, partial education in the field. Information best suited for a personal statement on a college, not masters degree level student application. One internship does not qualify as a professional experience. Unless you can beef up this application with some sort of professional experience, your statement of purpose is not going to stand out among the applicants for consideration, regardless of what university you are applying to.
