Whatever I do, I keep reminding myself my favorite aphorism:
"It is not enough to take steps which may someday lead to a goal; each step must be itself a goal and a step likewise."
Johann Wolfgang von Goethe
I was born in the family of doctors. Since childhood it was my dream to become a good doctor. I tried to take each step on this way with my best effort and graduated from XXXXXXXX with excellence.
As I delved deeper into medical sciences, I became increasingly aware that it would be virtually impossible to become a really good doctor in my country, as XXXXXXXXXXXX's health care system was one of the least effective in the Soviet republics, and it deteriorated further after Soviet Union collapsed. Therefore, I decided to continue my education abroad. As I had opportunity to travel a lot, I could see medical systems in European and Asian clinics. All the doctors whom I had an opportunity to know advised me to try to do residency in US. That's become a dream of my life; I decided to do my best to get residency position in US.
During my third year of medical school, when we started our clinical rotations, I quickly realized that Internal Medicine was my calling. Since then my desire to practice Internal Medicine has grown, as my exposure to the specialty is increased. The diversity of the field is particularly appealing. Internal Medicine will allow me to practice preventive medicine and provide continuity of care. Seeing patients on a regular basis and getting to know them and their families is rewarding.
While studying at the university, I had the opportunity to take part in research projects. Also I had a chance to do research for 4 month at the experimental laboratory of Mannheim Surgical Clinic, Heidelberg University, Germany. I worked on the project "Selenoproteins expression level in colon cancer patients". During free time I had an opportunity to be an observer at Internal Medicine department. It was really great experience for me.
A good relationship with colleagues is an important element of the medical practice. I enjoy working closely with and learning from my peers, but also assisting those that are junior to me. Mentoring medical students is gratifying. Helping them grow by teaching them concepts related to both patient care and research has made me look forward to instructing medical students during my residency and beyond.
I have been able to accomplish my dreams with the encouragement and support of my parents. I have learned from them, and from life experience. Enjoying swimming, chess, piano and spending time outdoors keeps me in touch with life outside of medicine.
My long-term goal is to pursue an Internal Medicine subspecialty. Exposure to all of the subspecialties in more depth will help me make my choice.
What you have now is coherent and possibly sufficient, but I'd like to see you say more about why you want to specialize in internal medicine specifically.
You might also want to talk more about what you hope to accomplish by working in Internal Medicine, exactly. What are your research goals, career goals, etc.
thanks a lot, thats exactly what i think to add, some specific points...
That is key to writing these sorts of things. You want to be as specific as possible about what you want to do and why.
I have seen they like specifics as well as introducing yourself. Like you are going to an interview and you want that job so you are going to focus on your achievements and why you are the best one for the job over everyone else.
