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Great job on your essay. I appreciate your usage of anecdotes to expound on the intent of your application. I think that you will go a long way with this.
I would only recommend that you could expound on why you have chosen this country. You had already cited a few reasons why the university is the best option for you individually. You can add on this through mentioning why the United Kingdom is your option for the program. You may even link your arguments here on what this country has to offer when it comes to your specialization or field. Are there, for instance, companies that you admire that are based in this country that make it better for your professional exposure to the program?
In addition, I would also recommend that you put specific details as to your future aspirations. I know that these are not necessarily mentioned to be requirements when you're still applying for the program (not in the list of questions to be tackled) - but adding these details would enable the evaluators to recognize that you are willing to go above and beyond to be part of their specific program. If you are aiming to be noticed, this will enhance what they know about you. Talk about how their courses and the program itself can help you become better in the field overall. Discuss why you fit into their academic environment.
The more specific and in-depth you are, the better it will be for your chances of being noticed.
Thank you very much for your response.
I agree with your suggestions. However, in case I proceed in those additions, I am not sure how the extended length of my statement will be evaluated. The fact that they have mentioned a specific 500-word limit on their website makes me uncertain about it.