I am very interested in studying Master of Mechanical Engineering with Naval Architecture and Marine Engineering Specialization. I got Bachelor of Marine Engineering from Myanmar Maritime University.During my final year undergraduate period, we study naval architecture and marine engineering as major subject. I got many theoretical knowledge about these subjects. I am very enthusiasm to apply my knowledge in the Actual Industry. So, after graduation, I joined as an Assistant Marine Engineer to one of the Marine Engineering Companies in Myanmar. As an Assistant Engineer, I repaired many mechanical parts such as pumps,motors,valves,piston,cylinder liner,crankshaft etc. Besides, I assist to Structural Engineer such as hull structure construction,hull stress calculation,hull resistance,preparation of general arrangement etc.,. After doing this jobs, I started to interest in studying Naval Architecture. So, I want to learn more about Naval Architecture. I want to develop my knowledge in Naval Architecture and Marine Engineering. I am willing to join Master of Mechanical Engineering with Naval Architecture and Marine Engineering Specialization.
Marine industry is one of the most important industries in the world. Most of the goods are carried by ships because it is the cheapest way to carry. After I study Master degree, I will gain more knowledge before. So, I can apply these knowledge in developing my country.
Your statement of purpose essay is too simplistic in content and does not display the kind of information and expertise that would impress the admissions officers reading your essay. You need to develop the essay to reflect a higher intellectual calling rather than this college level essay that you wrote. There are actually a number of guide questions that you can use to help you write this essay at a higher level. Let me share those guide questions with you below:
1. What is your current profession? How long have you been working in the position? Don;t forget that you need to have at least 1.5 years of working experience prior to your masters degree application. Make sure to mention your number of years working in your essay.
2. Do you have a purpose for your desire to enter into higher studies? You need to explain the reasons why you feel that you need a degree at this higher level. Is it just for your intellectual growth? Or do you plan on pursuing a higher employment position or change in employment in the future that will warrant advanced studies?
3. Give an overview of your college education. Concentrate on your more recent training or seminars attended that are relevant to your profession. This will give the admissions officers and idea as to your current theoretical level of understanding of your job requirements.
4. Explain thoroughly what your short and long term plans are and how you plan to take advantage of the university master course program to achieve those end results.
Once you respond to those basic guide questions, you will not only have revised your essay, but you will also have offered the most necessary information that will be considered by the admissions officers when deciding your merits as a future masters degree student.