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Urban Design Degree
I have always loved travelling and reading about other cultures since I was a little boy. I have read books about people and places, watched people who live all over the world on television and admired their diverse environments, way of life, and their values. From what I watched and learnt about people who live in diverse worlds, I noticed that most cities like New York City were well planned and structured, while other cities like Bangalore are unplanned and mostly slums. From my perspective, a social divide exists between the planned and unplanned cities where the rich and top middle-class live in planned cities and the poor live in unplanned cities with lots of environmental pollution as if they are undeserved to live on this planet. This influenced me to study urban and regional planning (URP). I will like to pursue a graduate degree in urban design at ******. This opportunity will equip me with the tools to close the social divide between these two classes of cities. I want to plan the unplanned and neglected cities/slums to make the lives of these neglected people better and also to improve our environment.
I carried out a research project on the roles of local government in rural socio-economic development during my undergraduate program and I was able to proffer solutions to the problems of diversity in socio-economic development within rural areas by the local government. Pursuing this degree at **** will expand my horizon and give me opportunities to study other cities and the problems they face, in terms of socio-economic importance, clean and conducive environment, and clean energy.
Humans have a lot of influence on the world, and without adequate planning, we will live in a world where we will face different problems like: polluted environment, traffic congestion-which will cause an increase in air pollution, environmental degradation, increased crime rate and it will also widen the gap between the social class.
My plan is to complete a Masters degree in urban design, work and advocate for clean, conducive and planned environments. I want to see a world where Asia, Africa, Europe, America and so on will be properly and adequately planned. It will be a plus to our society if urban planning will be added to our primary school and high school curriculum. With proper and adequate planning of our environment and cities, we will be equipped with tools to live in a creative, well structured, safe and healthy world.