I witness numbers of people being rude or mistreating others - outrages

this is the beginning of my essay so far...
The thing that outrages me the most is when I witness accounts of people being rude or mistreating other people. I have always believed that as the golden rule states, to treat others as you would want them to treat you. Everyone deserves the same amount of respect. I never understood how people treat others just because of a certain criteria is not met. If someone is a different ethnicity, religion, or just has different problems. They all should be treated in the same manner of respect. I come from a background where people are treated differently because you are a woman.

Maureen, you are kind of going in all directions at once in your introduction. That will make it difficult for your to develop your essay properly. I suggest choosing only the one topic that outrages you the most when it comes to seeing it happen in front of your and then discussing that. Make sure to develop your plan of action from the start. Meaning how you felt when you first witnessed such an event, what you felt that you had to do about it, and what you actually did. Then work your way up to your current status of observing the same trend getting worse over the years and what you plan to do about it in the future. That should be a good start for a working draft :-) It will also help if you can post the completed essay, even if it is in disarray in this thread so we can get a clearer idea of what and how you are trying to discuss the topic.

Any word limit? Because the essay looks minimal.
'The thing that outrages me the most is,''--- Change this line. It is like repeating the essay prompt, so the admission officer can easily lose interest about your essay. Start with something catchy. Or start from here..

---> I have witnessed the accounts of people being rude or mistreating other people. This experience made me believe the golden rule that states, one should treat others as one would like them to treat one. Etc..

I hope this help