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a disgusting sentence -wording grammar question


mmmargarita 10 / 79  
Dec 22, 2009   #1
I just remembered that I have a disgusting sentence that I need to fix in one of my college app supplements. I'd like to submit this application as soon as possible, so I would definitely appreciate some suggestions!

"That the physicians are also professors exemplifies the real-world approach to education that I value"

I know, it sounds terrible, but I can't figure out how to re-word it.

OP mmmargarita 10 / 79  
Dec 22, 2009   #2
By the way, I'd like to avoid saying "The fact that physicians..." Also, I realized it would make more sense as "That the professors are also physicians exemplifies the real-world approach to education that I value"
politik 6 / 34  
Dec 22, 2009   #3
The real-world education that I value is exemplified here as the physicians are also professors.
Keng 39 / 134  
Dec 23, 2009   #4
In my opinion, i use whether the physicians are also professors or not examplifies

If you use That , it is correct in terms of grammar, but it is a kind of awkward sentence.

when my essay is revised in the essayforum, many people changed the word "that" to "whether."
timeturner36 8 / 26  
Dec 23, 2009   #5
"That the physicians are also professors exemplifies the real-world approach to education that I value"

I value the real world approach to education taught by professors who are also physicians.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,334 129  
Dec 25, 2009   #6
The professors are also practicing physicians, and this authenticity reflects the real-world approach to education that draws me to [name of school].

I think the "ugly" way you had it was actually very good!
ezg_14 - / 2  
Dec 25, 2009   #7
good job with the word choices


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