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'the easily to be damaged nature of water resources' - asking for advice for one sentence.


cathyliu 19 / 54  
Feb 18, 2015   #1
i want to express: water resources which possess the nature that it is easily to be damaged, could I say :

the easily to be damaged nature of water resources;
OP cathyliu 19 / 54  
Feb 18, 2015   #2
if i say:
Kulshreshtha considers the vulnerability of water resources to be its easily to be damaged nature,
IS IT CORRECT?
Vns9x 102 / 236 16  
Feb 18, 2015   #3
The water resources of the nature can be easily damaged.
I hope that is what you need.
TJLuschen - / 241 203  
Feb 18, 2015   #4
If you want to use "nature" in your sentence you could say "The vulnerability of water resources is that by their very nature, they can be easily damaged." or you can say it more succinctly by leaving out "nature" :

"Water resources are vulnerable, since they can be easily damaged."
OP cathyliu 19 / 54  
Feb 19, 2015   #5
thank you(☆_☆)
OP cathyliu 19 / 54  
Feb 19, 2015   #6
"its difficulties" - help me check this sentence

Based on above opinions, the vulnerability of water resources is defined as the vulnerable characteristics of water environment to damages from human activities and natural factors, as well as its difficulties to restore to its original state after being damaged.

Here
" its difficulties "
I want to express that the difficulties characteristics of water environment to restore to its original state after being damaged.
TJLuschen - / 241 203  
Feb 19, 2015   #7
Here is my suggestion:

Based on [the] above opinions, the vulnerability of water resources is defined as the vulnerable characteristics of [the] water environment to damag[e ] from human activities and natural factors, as well as [the difficulty in restoring it] its difficulties to restore to its original state after being damaged.
OP cathyliu 19 / 54  
Feb 24, 2015   #8
In order to avoid the influences of subjective factors to improve the objectivity of evaluation results, and to make the method to be operated easily, this paper attempts to introduce the Data Envelopment Analysis (DEA) to assess the vulnerability of water environment.

Here, the first sentence is not fluent.
in order to avoid A , which leads to the results B. the first result would lead to the second,
how can I express it authentically?
OP cathyliu 19 / 54  
Feb 24, 2015   #9
Another sentense:

This method, basing on the concept of water resource vulnerability, considersthe vulnerability of water resource as a function of sensitivity and pressure resistance under the influence of climate changes and human activities;

In this sentence, the subject is the method, so delete the middle sentence, basing ..., it becomes : the method considers the ... as ..
1) Is the structure of this sentence correct?

2) basing ? I am a little puzzled, could I use 'based' instead?

3) or better suggestion for the expression.

Thank you very much^^
OP cathyliu 19 / 54  
Feb 24, 2015   #10
sentence 3
Therefore, it is necessary to evaluate the vulnerability of water environment in humid regions of southern China , to provide theoretical support for the water environment management

it is necessary to do sth. in ~~China, to ..., Here should i Omit the , ?

Is it better if i add '' in these regions" in the end of this sentence. ... to provide theoretical support for the water environment management in these regions. As the middle sentence 'in humid regions of southern China' make I feel it is not fluent. -_-

grea...t thanks.
TJLuschen - / 241 203  
Feb 24, 2015   #11
Maybe; "Taking care to avoid the influences of subjective factors in order to improve the objectivity of evaluation results, and to allow the method be implemented easily, this paper attempts to introduce the Data Envelopment Analysis (DEA) to assess the vulnerability of a water environment."

Yes, the correct word here is "based"

This method, based on the concept of water resource vulnerability, considers the vulnerability of water resource as a function of sensitivity and pressure resistance under the influence of climate changes and human activities;

"Pressure resistance" sounds a little unclear to me - what do you mean?

I don't see which "the" you are talking about. I think you need something like "these regions", but avoid repetition. Maybe

Therefore, it is necessary to evaluate the vulnerability of the water environment in humid areas of southern China , to provide theoretical support for the water environment management in these regions.
OP cathyliu 19 / 54  
Feb 25, 2015   #12
reply to Chen:

1. Pressure resistance means Resisitance to the pressure.

2. don't see which "the" you are talking about.

Origin: Therefore, it is necessary to evaluate the vulnerability of water environment in humid regions of southern China , to provide theoretical support for the water environment management

My question: It is necessary to do sth. in ~~China,to ..., Here should i Omit the,
Here the,, I mean the punctuation symbol.
there are four kinds of expression, I do not know which is the best one.

A : Therefore, it is necessary to evaluate the vulnerability of water environment in humid regions of southern China, to provide theoretical support for the water environment management in these regions.

B :Therefore, it is necessary to evaluate the vulnerability of water environment in humid regions of southern China for theoretical support of water environment management in these regions.

C Therefore, it is necessary to evaluate the vulnerability of water environment in humid regions of southern China provding theoretical support for water environment management in these regions.

I think you could see my disturb are mainly in three places,
one is the punctuation(now I think maybe it is better to add a punctuation in such long sentence);
another is : to provide /providing / for providing , (here I am not sure which is the best one. ) ;
third : in these regions (which I have acceptted your advice. )

sentence 3.

In order to avoid the influences of subjective factors to improve the objectivity of evaluation results, and to make the method to be operated easily, this paper attempts to introduce the Data Envelopment Analysis (DEA) to assess the vulnerability of water environment.

Here, the first sentence is not fluent.
in order to avoid A , which leads to the results B. the first result would lead to the second,
how can I express it authentically?

Sentence 4:

Generally, the higher the pollution efficiency is, the easier to be damaged the water environment will be and the greater vulnerability it will be; on the contrary, the less efficiency it is, the smaller vulnerability it will be.

the higher the pollution efficiency is = the higher pollution efficiency it is?
the easier to be damaged the water environment will be
the greater vulnerability it will be;
the less efficiency it is, the smaller the vulnerability will be.= the smaller vulnerability it will be?

are the four sentence correct?
TJLuschen - / 241 203  
Feb 25, 2015   #13
1. Pressure resistance means Resisitance to the pressure.

Yes, I realize that, but what pressure? I guess you mean the damaging influence of climate change and human activities, but it is not that clear to me.

2. don't see which "the" you are talking about.

A : Therefore, it is necessary to evaluate the vulnerability of water environment in humid regions of southern China, to provide theoretical support for the water environment management in these regions.

A is best, B is ok, but C is not really correct

sentence 3.
In order to avoid the influences of subjective factors to improve the objectivity of evaluation results, and to make the method to be operated easily, this paper attempts to introduce the Data Envelopment Analysis (DEA) to assess the vulnerability of water environment.

Here, the first sentence is not fluent.
in order to avoid A , which leads to the results B. the first result would lead to the second,
how can I express it authentically?

this was my idea: "Taking care to avoid the influences of subjective factors in order to improve the objectivity of evaluation results, and to allow the method be implemented easily, this paper attempts to introduce the Data Envelopment Analysis (DEA) to assess the vulnerability of a water environment."

Sentence 4:

Generally, the higher the pollution efficiency is, the easier to be damaged the water environment will be and the greater vulnerability it will be; on the contrary, the less efficiency it is, the smaller vulnerability it will be.

the higher the pollution efficiency is = the higher pollution efficiency it is?
the easier to be damaged the water environment will be
the greater vulnerability it will be;
the less efficiency it is, the smaller the vulnerability will be.= the smaller vulnerability it will be?

are the four sentence correct?

Not really, maybe:
"Generally, the higher the pollution efficiency, the more easily damaged the water environment will be and the greater vulnerability it will have; on the contrary, the less efficient it is, the smaller vulnerability it will have."

or to be less repetitive:
"Generally, the higher the pollution efficiency, the more easily damaged the water environment will be and the greater vulnerability it will have; on the contrary, a lower efficiency corresponds to a reduced vulnerability"


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