HEY :) PLEASE CRITIQUE!
its due in dec. 1st!!! THANK YOU!
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The Italian polymath Michelangelo once said: the greater danger for most of us lies not in setting our aim too high and falling short; but in setting our aim too low, and achieving our mark
Annually, enormous numbers of intellectuals apply to and attend Stanford University. Applying to Stanford may be aiming high, but I chase the dream, not the competition.
I believe Stanford University comprises of a global community, one which traverses racial, cultural and national boundaries. It is a population committed to embracing and serving society, a task I want to contribute to.
Stanford is the ideal environment for a well-rounded, globally enriching education; a home where my love for economics and music can be combined, appreciated and enhanced. Stanford is the family that will push me beyond my limits, and propel me to new heights. The School of Humanities and Sciences will provide me with the encouragement, support and courage to reach beyond my boundaries, rigorously preparing me for the real world. Studying economics at Stanford encompasses an amalgamation of everything necessary to become globally successful: familiarization with the tools to analyze contemporary economic dilemmas, and development of the ability to accurately judge and evaluate public policy. Enhancing decision-making skills and systematic analyses of costs and benefits will further prepare me for a future career in business.
Being the only school which embraces my talents, and allows me to pursue my interests, I am certain that Stanford is perfect for me. From studying in any one of Stanford's twenty libraries to discussing global issues with friends by the beautiful Lake Lagunita, I know that Stanford University will be a place where I can develop my interests and talents, and a diverse community to which I can contribute unconditionally.
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thanks guys!
p.s. is it too short? its 291 words!
TYTY :)
It was good. :) I thought your starting sentences were excellent.
I'm working on the same essay, but I'm at a lack of where to get the "research" for it. People have directed me to the stanford site, but is there a particular place you went to for the information on the School of Humanities and Sciences, etc. ?
Thanks, and good luck :)
PS: Are you doing the art supplement as well? What instrument do you play? Also do you know what time it's due? Is it nov. 30 11:59 or dec 1st 11:59?
PPS: No it's not too short as long as it's over 250 words.
Hey Jen :)
dont know if this helps: stanford.edu/dept/humsci/external/under/index.html
i just browsed the internet in general, so im sorry i cant give a direct link cause i dont even remember what sites i ended up on!
and yup, im handing in the arts supplement! i THINK its nov. 30 11.59pm :P but im not entirely sure, but try getting it in before then to be on the safe side! i play the piano :P sucha typical instrument huh? :) what about yoou?
Oh eww. Nov. 30 11:59 sucks.
And yeah, but I'm a realllly bad procrastinator. And writing isnt my strong point. So it will probably be turned in sometime around 10 pm :/
And I play the clarinet. (Ever heard of that? :P)
PS:
So is "Humanities and Sciences" a subgroup of Stanford's schools? What are all the possible schools // or where is there a list of them? or a place that explains this system?
omg im sucha procrastinator too! haha i left everything till this weekend, SMART.
stanford.edu/dept/uga/academic/programs/schools_depts.html <------ this site has the names of the schools and stuff. but im not too sure if its all for undergrads and stuff.
and of course i know what the clarinet is! haha, thats pretty coool. i wish i had a more exotic instrument, i bet half the people submitting arts supp play the piano!
There is not much to say...
Its pretty much good to go!!!
I hope your dream becomes a reality!!!
:)
I thought the deadline for Stanford RD was January 1? I appied EA so I wouldnt know...
I think your essay was well written. The only thing I would say (though it may be too late now) is that it doesnt seem to answer too thuroughly the YOU part of the question. You do a great job talking about why Stanford is a fantastic school (which I'm sure they already know). I think you could make a better case for why in particular it is a good school for you as opposed to other top notch schools. Why are you a better fit at Stanford than at Yale or Harvard?
Yeah...it could use a bit of personal touch.
but that is a hard question to answer, because yale and harvard are great schoosl as well
I really like your first sentence. That's good because you don't want the admissions person to start off with something boring.
do you mind reading mine? =) I'm applying to UW though
