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"I will feast on an extravagant meal" - interest of study, my essay for Georgetown


collegegirl24 2 / 13  
Dec 26, 2010   #1
Georgetown College: Please relate your interest in studying at Georgetown University to your goals. How do these thoughts relate to your chosen course of study?

One of the ways I experience cultures is through cuisine. I have eaten flautas in Mexico, lingonberry jam in Sweden, poutine in Quebec, and platanos asados in Costa Rica. I have compared the spicy taste of Mexican food to the bland taste of Swedish, and through this have formulated my ideal tastes. The same way, I have compared cultural behaviours of each ethnic group and through this have formulated my own values.

But tasting these dishes has not been as easy as it sounds. From a young age, I developed a strong desire to experience the cultures of the world and move away from my homogeneous Jewish, privileged environment. With much convincing, I was given the opportunity to travel on language exchanges and immersion programs. I began to love what these opportunities gave me: they questioned values that had been engrained in me. I have grown from these experience with a strong world view. These immersion experiences have proven so beneficial to me that I have tried to replicate them in my own home through cooking the dishes I tasted in that country. But to my disappointment, I can never get the enchiladas just right, or else the plantains are lacking the freshness of those in Costa Rica.

Through living with a host family on my exchange in Mexico and volunteering with locals while on an immersion program in Quebec, I learned that what interests me the most is how one's identity is influenced by family and culture. I seek to understand these cultural values in greater depth. Georgetown is a hub of cultural diversity. The Hawaii Club, La Société Francophone, and Ballet Folklorico Mexicano de Georgetown are all areas I wish to get involved in to learn about the lifestyle of those cultures. I am also interested in how various experiences can affect a person's sense of self. Erik Erikson examined how a person develops independence, sense of capability, but most importantly a sense of who they are as members of wider society. I wish to fully immerse myself in the study of psychology to understand factors that affect our sense of self. I would specialize in "Conceptual and Developmental Foundations" and get involved with the research of Professor Phillips, whose passion for her subject transcends beyond the classroom.

While many of my peers will be entering university in search of their role as an individual, my many experiences living with other families and interacting with various socio-economic groups have allowed me to determine my own values separate from those of my family. I have emerged as an independent-thinker, with a strong world view and a sense of capability. I am a passionate feminist and a dedicated vegetarian. I want to advocate for these groups during my years at Georgetown. But most importantly, because I have developed my own sense of self, I want to help others develop theirs. Erikson's stage of development when one discovers their role in wider society requires one to become removed from their own culture. I wish to encourage immigrants to part with their own cultural values and instead create their own, which I can do through the D.C. Schools Project. By participating in Prison Outreach, I can expose in-mates to literature and academic disciplines, and through this they can determine their own values. By participating in Girl Talk, I can help adolescent girls make sense of their role in the world. With Dance DC, by sharing my passion for tap dance and hip hop with underprivileged children , they can develop self-confidence through the performing arts .

Obama described the United States not as a Christian nation, a Muslim nation, or a Jewish nation, but a nation of citizens bound by ideals and sets of values. I believe this is best seen in Washington, which is a mixture of Native people, people of Latino, European, Asian and African descent. At Georgetown, I will no longer have to actively seek out various cultural dishes that I can only taste for a short period of time. Rather, I will feast on an extravagant meal of Afghan batter fried eggplant, a thickend gazpacho of Spanish Salmorejo, Italian pizza al taglio, and Indian gujarat.

Please be critical! I welcome all feedback. Thank you so much.
tanyasilva11 10 / 38  
Dec 26, 2010   #2
this is so good! it reveals a lot about yourself, answers the question, and shows that you have a good amount of knowledge of Georgetown University. My only criticism is that some sentences could be combined; so look through your essay and try to condense your sentences. Other than that, good job!
Benn_Myers 8 / 46  
Dec 27, 2010   #3
This is a good essay, and our pal Mr. Erickson is making another appearance. My advice for this essay is similar to that I gave you for your last prompt, although to a much lesser degree. This is already a good essay and the only problem I might have with it is it does tend to dabble more in the intellectual and abstract then the grounded and emotional; that being said, it dwells in the intellectual and abstract very well.

I would consider adding a anecdote (if you the word limit allows) with more emotion. If that isn't the case then I would probably call it good, this essay is solid and a major reworking of it to make it "more emotional" is honestly not worth the time.

I won't be able to give you any more feedback on your essays until next Sunday (which is presumably after deadline) collegegirl 24, I'll be in an area without computers. I'll try to get on and look it over if you make any edits, but as far as I go your most likely on your own from here out.

But don't worry, your essays are good. Best of luck mate.


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