With all the ingredients laid out in a symphony of delicious colors, it
' s
/it is amazing what you can make.
As I debate whether or not I should try spicing up my dish, the further I thought, my curiosity only grewgrows further.
I don't think you should use present tense since you're using past tense for the rest of the essay.
I suggest:
As I debated
, whether or not I should try spicing up my dish,
the further I thought, my curiosity
only grew
further .
Uh, you used present tense initially and then you changed to past tense. I think you should keep it consistent throughout the essay.
As I pour
ed the fresh tomato sauce into the pot, the odor of delicacy tickle
d my nose and I can only imagine what I could add. I start
ed off by adding my favorite ingredients: shrimp, broccoli, carrots, onions
and garlic. However, while stirring my sauce, a long green hook vegetable
caught the corner of my eye.
I enjoyed reading it; you must me a great cook! Comment on my essays too please:)