BU Supplement - Roommate - Mulan, Field Report

This supplement is the hardest thing I have ever written!! And I thought it would be the easiest... I'm still working on it right now, but I just wanted to know if the direction I'm going in is okay. I'm afraid it's too risky and unprofessional.

Prompt: It is three weeks before the start of your freshman year at BU, and you are talking to your new roommate for the first time. Since you are trying to get to know each other, what are a few things you would want to share about who you are? (500 words max)

Who am I? Who am I?! I am the guardian of lost souls! I am the powerful, the pleasurable, the indestructible--- Hold on, hold on, let us rewind for a second. That lizard-like red dragon you just saw over there is Mushu. And that little Chinese warrior next to the horse is actually a woman, and her name is Mulan. You see, when I found out you wanted to get to know me a little better, I just knew I had to introduce you to my friends. Mushu and Mulan have been with me ever since I was a toddler, and they know me best! I asked them to conduct a field study of me and this is what they discovered.

Name: Ms. Alicia Tang
Species Type: A proud Homo Sapien Sapien
Natural Habitat(s): where the wild things are, the center of a heavily-populated city, her bed
Distinctive Physical Features: straight black hair, pinchable baby cheeks, intimidating eyes
Habits: Moving around. Despite being confined in a seat or between walls, she always manages to spontaneously break out into dance. Even when she's eating. She also clenches her fists and twirls her hair when she is in deep thought or concentration. These habits occurs multiple times throughout the day and is usually coupled with muttered speaking. Beware she often laughs to (or at) herself.

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My questions/comments:
- Do you think the AO's will know who/what Mulan is?
- I wanted to use "detailed" bullet points since that's what field reports are like, but I didn't think the AO's would like that. What do you think?

- Since the field report is written by my two "friends" Mushu and Mulan, I want to make it a bit silly, but I'm not sure if the AO's will remember/understand that in this context, I'm not the who wrote the field report. (I don't want them to get confused with all the little silly comments)

- I think in the field report, I switch back and forth from a silly tone and a more professional tone. Would it be bad to go with the silly tone?

- If you're wondering why I chose to use a field report, it's because I was watching a movie and I thought the idea was interesting. I'm not planning on majoring in anything that has to do with field studies though so is that bad?

Comments, critiques, anything is greatly appreciated! If you think this whole entire thing is too weird and that I should just start over, then please do tell me. Thanks! :)

It's very creative, but since the prompt states You are talking to your roommate, you might want to change it or incorporate the field report into email form of some kind. I found what you were trying to do with Mulan and Mushu kinda confusing, i think should write it from your perspective but add why those characters are significant to you, if there not you shouldn't mention it. The essay mainly allows you to express things about yourself that your not able to in the rest of ur application. I hope that helps.

If you could critique mine as well that be cool, i also applying to BU.

First of all I have to say that this is a unique essay, and one that certainly captures the reader's attention. So well done!


Doesn't matter. They want to know you, not Mulan. In case they are looking for additional animation-character-trivia knowledge, they can always google.


It's fine as it is. No need to change it.


I think it's brilliant. Just out of curiosity -- what is your intended major?


I don't think there should be any problem with that. However, I do think your essay highlights your superficial traits like appearance, physical behaviour, etc. more than your character. A roommate would want to know what your likes and dislikes are, whether you are an extrovert or an introvert. Basically, stuff that projects your personality.

These habits occur multiple ...

Thanks for all the comments/critiques! I can't decide if I want to keep this format or just go with my simpler one...

ershad193,
I'm applying as undecided